Re: a comment on Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise	23-Sep-03/8:02 PM
Excellent resource, thanks. I guess according to them it would be an 'imperfect broken rhyme'. Doesn't sound healthy, but at least it's better than a nuclear detonation.
Re: this meal was knowledge by nentwined	23-Sep-03/6:08 PM
You rung my bells. Good. I would come up with a more repugnantly digestive phrase for 'rendered moot'. Also I would delete the 'food for some other living entity' line. Some buffing here and there and I would be proud to call it my baby. We do grow some good shit here every now and then, though, you have to admit.
Re: a comment on Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise	23-Sep-03/5:56 PM
Not exactly. They do sound similar, and they aren't spelled similarly and wouldn't come near to passing an 'eye' test.
Re: a comment on Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise	23-Sep-03/5:00 PM
Do you know what the word is for the 'gorgeous'/'poor, just' device? It's not really a proper rhyme. There has to be some word for it that I'm not aware of.
Re: My Friend Burgers by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	23-Sep-03/12:00 AM
My friend Burgers. Don't know how, but my arm twitched and clicked on a 7 involuntarily.
Re: pocketful of laden activity by A. Nomaly	22-Sep-03/11:58 PM
A changeling of meaning given shelter for confession
Re: a comment on this is your poetry by nentwined	22-Sep-03/8:16 PM
(smile) - Should've left the acrostic tag to the observant eye. Always build trap doors and secret entrances and hidden treasures into your poetry, I say.
Re: a comment on Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise	22-Sep-03/4:26 PM
That is a good one. I once tried to rhyme 'leprous' and 'zesty' and it resulted in a small nuclear explosion (I'm okay, though).
Re: a comment on Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise	22-Sep-03/4:09 PM
Hear! Hear!
Re: a comment on Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise	22-Sep-03/2:11 PM
I prefer your amusement ;)
Re: Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise	22-Sep-03/12:10 AM
[X] AABB rhyming scheme [X] About romantic love [X] About writing [X] About suicide or self-mutilation [X] Arbitrary indentation [X] Arbitrary line breaks [X] Autobiographical but in the third person [X] Clerical errors [X] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, pits of despair) [X] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart) [X] 'Depression' words (putrid, wretched, darkness) [X] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments ******[_] Devoid of rhyme [X] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices ******[_] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery [X] Drug reference [X] Elves, unicorns, etc. [X] Insipidly whimsical or zany [X] Internet shorthand or emoticons [X] Leaving rant [X] Lower case [X] 'Lyrics' [X] Melodramatic [X] Naively religious or superstitious [X] Obsessed with femininity [X] Overabundance of ellipses [X] Pointedly unanswered questions [X] Rage against the machine [X] Reference to the author's 'social life' [X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea [X] Sanctimonious [X] Self-obsessed [X] Sentimental [X] Smugly-named protagonist [X] Thesaurophilia [X] Untitled [X] Vicarious wish fulfilment
Re: a comment on The words of touch by TheVoiceless	19-Sep-03/4:18 PM
That reminds me of a musical I saw once; "Cheese-and-Fries Superstar" or maybe it was "Jesus Christ Superstar" it was hard to tell because they were singing.
Re: a comment on The Same by newdawnfades	19-Sep-03/11:18 AM
Fair enough to the second part (that's a good enough reason). However I'm not aware of any serious research that suggest the first (I would appreciate any contrary references?) however there is a laundry list of research to support the idea that long term memories are formed only after a novel stimulus: Here are some references if you are interested: Cortical cholinergic activity is related to the novelty of the stimulus. - Miranda MI et al. (Neuroscience Letters) Bidirectional modulation of long-term potentiation by novelty-exploration in rat dentate gyrus. - Straube T et al. (Brain Res) The role of identified neurotransmitter systems in the response of insular cortex to unfamiliar taste: activation of ERK1-2 and formation of a memory trace. - Berman DE et al. (J Neurosci) Human hippocampus associates information in memory. Henke K et al. (PNAS) Contribution of human hippocampal region to novelty detection. Knight R. (Nature) (I'm not trying to be an ass here, I'm just having a discussion and trying my best to keep you honest. There are people with more experience than both you or I who don't know everything that's out there in the literature.)
Re: a comment on The Same by newdawnfades	19-Sep-03/1:04 AM
Are you interested in a discussion on this? I'm fairly confident that I could convince you that this combination idea (while figuratively attractive) is not literally true.
Re: The Same by newdawnfades	18-Sep-03/2:23 PM
Interesting. I think (open to discussion) that the middle stanza is flawed in your understanding of memories. Your brain is only set up to record memories of unique incidents. Therefore we do not carry memories of the menial day-to-day. They do not form a mass. They form a hole in our existence - vast stretches of our life without any record of our having lived it! I think if you rewrite this poem with this understanding it will even be stronger (and the connection between death and routine that much closer). Just a thought.
Re: a comment on Babelfish Poetry (IV): Hablaré en pensamientos (Español) by Geschäftsreise	18-Sep-03/2:13 PM
Gracias (con balbucee)
Re: on the edge of creation by nentwined	17-Sep-03/10:00 AM
Gshcäft (Disguised as Deerfly): "and yet you skipped over my babelfish poetry?" :)
Re: Mentor by <~>	16-Sep-03/9:27 PM
Makes me wish there was someone I felt that way about. My life is all sunbathers and surfers - no one is up for volleyball when it gets hot.
Re: Upside down and tigers by horus8	16-Sep-03/6:18 PM
Overall, though finely and functionally dressed, there is a sublime quality to the title that isn't quite matched by its wardrobe.\ (I've seen an ivory tiger, but never tiger ivory. How about something like: "blood whiskers, eye-shines, and canines"? )
Re: a comment on Babelfish Poetry (VI): les Graines de Notre Fin (Français) by Geschäftsreise	16-Sep-03/10:09 AM
Yes, good catch. Ishmael is one of those novels that has been absorbed into my thoughts on this subject (although I think Quinn's 'solution' is as false as our ability to do anything about the problem). When you are performing genetics, there is a "Parental" (P) line that gives birth to the "First Filial" (F1), who then gives birth to the "Second Filial" (F2), etc. The use of First Filial is intended to evoke the concept that nations and civilizations have heritable characteristics that can influence its utlimate fate (just as much as your genetics dictate the course of your life). *see 'meme' if you are interested in this line of thought.