regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/12:12 PM
What a sweet poem, I can tell you put a lot of feeling into it, thanks for sharing
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/12:28 PM
beautiful, and it flows so easily
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Sep-03/8:11 AM
Cute poem! I kinda like how Shmuel shortened it, I think you could still incorporate a part about God though, since that is important to you, just maybe do it from an angle that fits with the poem better
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Sep-03/12:42 PM
two thumbs up, wish I could express myself through poem more
Re: Boy by clark187	24-Sep-03/2:42 PM
cute, like the parts about it being like a painting or pastel drawing
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Sep-03/9:14 AM
First I read it too fast but when I read it one more time and gave some thought to it I could feel it more and I liked it
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Sep-03/9:52 AM
good, but I bet you could smooth it out a little more 8
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Sep-03/9:40 PM
Whoa, enjoyable. I really liked the last too lines to top it off. I would have been able to read it better with a little punctuation. . .but I'm sure when you read it out loud it's there
Re: sewer rat by irishfolksuicide	25-Sep-03/9:42 PM
never thought I could like a poem about a rat so much!
Re: personality by irishfolksuicide	25-Sep-03/9:44 PM
made me snicker.
Re: paper boats by sally6479	27-Sep-03/10:18 PM
I like some of the ideas and the memories that you are talking about, but it kind of falls apart and rambles a little towards the end. I bet you could put it together better.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Oct-03/10:32 PM
It's crap, all crap. . .no just teasing I like it, and I'll be checking back later to see it finished I'm sure
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Oct-03/10:38 PM
I wonder what it would sound like to music :)
Re: I'm Aboard by Ali_cat018	2-Oct-03/12:37 PM
I like the train metaphor, I would suggest working some more train related words in there and maybe working with the flow a little
Re: the way things are goin' by irishfolksuicide	2-Oct-03/12:40 PM
liked the "bull moo." Maybe use another word instead of "cracked" twice
Re: Fate by leviathan	2-Oct-03/12:52 PM
I don't know did we really all do "the best we could"? do we really breath out thanksgiving? and give thanks everytime we pray?
Re: Tailor Made by OnTheOtherHand	5-Oct-03/9:31 PM
Kinda like something in this. why was green the color you picked though? Just wondering
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Oct-03/1:32 PM
I like the first 3 lines and the last one too, but I've seen your other poems . . .I know you can do better.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Oct-03/10:38 AM
I can't tell you how much I like this poem. . .10
Re: Never Love A Poet by Caducus	9-Oct-03/9:25 AM
I like it. . . I just don't get what you are saying in the 4th and 5th to last lines. . .8