Re: What I Do Know by PsydewaysTears	4-Jan-05/9:37 PM
it seems like a little to much of a "journal entry" type of poem. i really do like the question type of finish to each stanza. something i never did but really like the sound to it. you also throw exactly how you feel into writting. something i tend to stay away from but it helps the reader see the situation. thanks for commenting on my poem by the way.
Re: Untitled by justjay	18-Dec-03/10:55 AM
Short and sweet. I know there is no punctuation but the poem is still be "played" with. I may even add another verse or two. but i just made this one last night and thought hey why not put it up on poemrankers so people can destroy it
Re: a comment on Starting Over by justjay	3-Nov-03/12:05 PM
I specifically chose the name justjay cuz it's just the way i am. i don't need some "more assertive" way of saying who i am. I can say my whole personality and whole life in just the words just jay. that's all i am. . .
Re: ode to kurt by NobodyGirl9	18-Aug-03/8:40 PM
haha great great limerick. first time giving this vote number but i think u deserve it. 10
Re: Jack Frost by Kitch	18-Aug-03/8:39 PM
remember lyrics are poems that should be set to music. well in music u usually have a chorus and the chorus is usually repeated. i don't see that in there. it's a decent song but i think it needs alittle more work. good job so far though. 6
Re: To Lesley by Bahookie	18-Aug-03/8:31 PM
almost gives a haiku feeling but to long. u should see maybe about chopping into a haiku or adding to it. give it an 8 though cuz i can feel it. nice job
Re: Dance With Me by marvelis	5-Aug-03/9:22 PM
i think ur trying to hard with your rhyming. most lyrics don't rhyme. You got to just let it flow instead of pushing to make things fit. overall i give it a 7
Re: Can you believe this piece of shit was #1? by horus8	2-Aug-03/9:18 PM
awesome work. kick the 0 people where it hurts!!!
Re: Mind Puddle by justjay	2-Aug-03/9:09 PM
i specifically put the periods in. i want pauses at the ends of the sentence. i personally wanted to slow down the reader. make them think about what they were reading. i never noticed you could only put 3 poems a week so i didn't even start with my personal favorite poems. but wait till next week.