Re: Bread Wine And Chocolate by Caducus	30-Mar-04/5:44 AM
I love this.. it fills me with an uncordial envy, and shame for not having come close to producing such a wicked & mighty haiku.. but worry not, I shall endure and soon enough my vile emotions will pass, beginning my mission to create a haiku to match yours, or atleast bring me closer to my "Golden Haiku from Satan". Blessed with ten.
Re: Sitting in a damp refrigerator box, wondering (ODE) Basque by zodiac	30-Mar-04/5:11 AM
Oh my.. indeed this is something I will cherish, a tonic of chuckles and depraved humor that feeds a weary & idle mind such as my own, causing it to vibrate in a universe-spliting surge of imaginative enjoyment... I do so love the wonders of a decent & dark parody. :) Blessed with ten.
Re: Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT	13-Mar-04/3:20 PM
Actually.. that does work better lol. blessed with eight.
Re: a comment on Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/2:30 PM
The very last one, Villanelle for D.G.B. I like the most, One Art was pretty good too, amusing. The others were good but didn't catch my fancy. Theres not many places where I can read vills, mostly I read the ones on rankerville and other scattered pieces on ezboards. That or the vills made free to read are dull.. poetry on the net of value is sparce, or I'm simply not lucky enough when searching for it.
Re: a comment on Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/1:46 PM
Roger Roger, shall fix it.
Re: a comment on Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/1:26 PM
Yeah, that pretty much informed me of what I knew not.. now I just need to figure what to use to get that meter right and not screw the sound of it.. I'll figure that out later on and post a second version, that or start a fresh one with attention to meter. Its a slight crutch I have; if I don't start out with meter in mind I get stuck correcting later in frustration. Oh, did I apply the apostrophe's correctly? thats all. Thank you for explaining it to me.
Re: a comment on Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/1:13 PM
Ranker Fact: Darkie doesn't like anything that I write or say/do, but thats his purpose in my life on rankerville. But aside from that, I'm throwin in the apostrophe. -and hopefully ill do it correctly! leave it to beaver and his meat cleaver-
Re: a comment on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT	13-Mar-04/12:48 PM
Looks like you're using the "Kid Glove" explaination.
Re: a comment on Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/12:38 PM
Have both? (well, I never knew darkie has his own special way for reading cursed) Ah, well, how bout I supplement that with CURST? That lets it flow better anyway.. I hope darkie doesn't have some special version of that. As for the short syllable lines: I wasn't paying exact attention to the meter. I'm probably wrong, but I thought it wasn't a requirement in a vill.. explain since I'd like to know the rules for the form.
Re: a comment on Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/12:14 PM
PS: this is my fourth? or fifth vil.. and nent needs to fix the spelling of villenelle, since he had me convinced theres only 3 l's.. and I feel foolish... oh well, he gets the blame. :x
Re: a comment on Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/12:10 PM
Don't ask how much time I spent to craft it.. but im getting better at it, and the one I made yesterday was loaded with angst. Atleast I'm getting some skill with form under the belt, and its pretty fun, even though I mold it with an old womans pace lol.
Re: a comment on Eris, my blade, the accurst villanelle by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/11:59 AM
*cough* that was a test... But HERE IS THE REAL POEM! MY BRAND SPANKIN NEW VILANELLE!! cmon now, I'm not one to hiss "sss" and call it my latest piece lol.
Re: a comment on Sometimes it Hurts... by mindsigns	13-Mar-04/8:03 AM
What ever happened to mixing pseudo-romance and farting as big No-No, rhymes & cliche aside? Maybe theres hope in using farts in a haiku about ass-licking.. as sick as that sounds.. its just more promising than the above poem.
Re: Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT	13-Mar-04/7:57 AM
Well, its not bad, but it isn't something that gets my juices boilin either.. the moment conveyed might be the problem, or.. ah whatever. It is worthy of my vile score of seven in any case.
Re: Sometimes it Hurts... by mindsigns	13-Mar-04/6:25 AM
soap-opera mini-serie? If only Jesus could bestow his vengeance upon thee..
Re: A brief history in destruction by mindsigns	13-Mar-04/6:23 AM
Brainwashing... genius.. pure genius.. soon enough we will be celebrating "Suicide Day".
Re: a comment on Gods Musician: Grave Digger by SupremeDreamer	13-Mar-04/1:46 AM
You know, you've just revealed that you actually go through my archives, I'm amazed. But anyway, I've never heard of that band, and if I'm going to write something about a band or a pop singer, it would most likely be a parody about Britney Spears Wardrobe and her false claims concerning her "virginity". But I doubt I'd ever get around to that anytime soon.
Re: a comment on Zodiac's Visit to Micky D's by Oej-Oej	11-Mar-04/8:50 PM
Your use of plain english in your work has alot of odd curiosities. Many times I've stumbled over scattered irregularities in grammar and sentence structure when reading some of your work- and it sure doesn't come across as poetic wordplay. I'm not one to act superior, I have my own querks in my use of the english language, even though I've greatly improved during my time at rankerville-- But you don't seem to pick up on your writing querks as far as I can tell. As for you being dim-witted? Narrow minded is more like it, but whatever. You have your moments, and other times it seems that you don't really think before speaking. At times your pretty edgy and sensitive to harsh criticism or opinions.. you certainly never reacted well to any of the parodies I've written concerning a few pieces of yours.
Re: Zodiac's Visit to Micky D's by Oej-Oej	11-Mar-04/8:36 PM
Whats this supposed to be? A parody? Its funny, a good joke, but its lacking.. since your description of zodiacs personality is purely fictional.. and has little relation to zodiac. But its an amusing piece never-the-less, thats worth an eight.
Re: a comment on Dawns Blood Concealed by SupremeDreamer	17-Feb-04/12:10 PM
I can take criticism just fine, but when someone says I'm being unoriginal, I'd like them to back it up in some way so that I know they aren't simply talking out of their shit-tube. And also so I can avoid being "unoriginal". Btw, your last statement pretty much makes my point about your comment being an act of retaliation.. So I don't think I need to get over myself.. but you do!!! Have a nice day.