| Re: To my Moneta by Bill Z Bub |
7-Mar-09/3:09 PM |
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Heh. How dare you be catchy in order to seduce hallmark cads to offer cash! Tsk. Here's an eight, you hallmark whore!
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| Re: To Writing by Lifeboatman |
15-Oct-09/2:59 AM |
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You know this isn't anywhere near as good as you could make it. Four.
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| Re: Dovina by Prince of Void |
15-Oct-09/3:00 AM |
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Brown-nosing for votes? How sad.
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| Re: Munnar -a must -see destination by Jessina |
5-Jul-11/12:15 PM |
*Yawn*
Landscape poetry is bland and well... a picture would be more appropriate... 'Specially since your execution of this piece is cliche for the most part.
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| Re: To my Love by Jessina |
5-Jul-11/12:56 PM |
Let me whisper to you the fine points of poetic law
cause breaking it can result in a broken jaw.
Uninspired rhyming causes me to smile.
My heart leaps at the chance to be vile.
Cliche prattle which mentions your soul
quickens my need for a needle in the hole.
Your drivel shines like meth so glittery white,
causing me to twitch in revulsion at night.
Your poem is a cascade of uninspired crap brimming
with the detritus of youth-- pubescent emotions blooming,
filling the air with the sound of frustrated screaming.
Woe to you, gripped in this particular sad stage of life--
you who hasn't yet come to understand the pains of real strife.
I wish that you'd reconsider sharing such poetry
because such lousy writing is far from lovely;
it causes my critique to be insultingly rude & lively.
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22-Dec-11/8:29 PM |
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| Re: Max's Poems by nentwined |
25-Sep-12/6:33 PM |
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Shameless advertising for Rockmage??? So your Gandalphs Poetry Agent now?
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| Re: what is poetry 101 by Skamper |
11-Feb-13/3:25 PM |
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Is this some sort of shitty attempt at a Haiku? Yes. It is. Labeling it free verse does not hide this fact.
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| Re: The Spell(Alice part I) by alvinb |
11-Feb-13/3:36 PM |
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This is not a lyric. It takes me barely more that 30 seconds to sing this. There's no fucking chorus. As free verse I'd be inclined to give this a four. As a "lyric"? 1.
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| Re: Rimming by wDaphnew |
11-Feb-13/3:46 PM |
Lunch at Windsor castle equivalent to having ones arse tongued? Makes me wonder what lunch at Windsor actually entails...
You're not related to darkie are you?
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| Re: Weather Poem 16 - Right and Wrong by nypoet22 |
11-Feb-13/3:50 PM |
This could be vastly improved. The title? crap. Weather is barely mentioned, and there is no right or wrong truly in love. All is fair. Feelings have no moral compass. They simple ARE.
Have a six.
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| Re: Wind By Any Other Name by Edna Sweetlove |
11-Feb-13/4:00 PM |
Wind might refer to the flatulence which escapes your mouth everytime you decide to open it. Yes... I think that is EXACTLY what you mean!!
TEN!
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| Re: Wind By Any Other Name by Edna Sweetlove |
11-Feb-13/4:00 PM |
Edna SweetAss would be a better name!!
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| Re: Wind By Any Other Name by Edna Sweetlove |
11-Feb-13/4:03 PM |
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Moi? Tu parle francais com un CON!!! Com un SALOPE!!! FUT TON MERE!
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| Re: Pandora's Box by Edna Sweetlove |
27-Mar-13/7:53 PM |
Must have had a really good camera to do that... does the follow up poem of this include the spread of STDs?
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| Re: what is poetry 101 by Skamper |
27-Mar-13/8:08 PM |
You know why you're so mad? Because I didn't declare it the greatest piece I've ever read... What is poetry? You thought to express that in a senryu/haiku? Mr. Haiku would punch you in the face. Honestly, he would. In my hey-day? I'd have awarded you with a fucking zero. Don't get all defensive and BUTT-HURT!!!
Oh shit, did the yelling upset you? ... Fucking asshat. Be thankful this isn't face to face... I'd let you know what yelling sounds like. :D
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| Re: wall flower by Freethinker1602 |
27-Mar-13/8:18 PM |
Ahh... this is ripe for greatness. The theme resonates, yet you didn't exectute it in the best manner.
Speak of the dances that come BEFORE your yearning for the last. Speak of that which inspired you to bother dancing in the first place... And PLEASE let it not be teenaged weariness for fuck sakes. ;/ List them as they come and have them evolve to an acceptance of death. We all grow weary, and all of us shall dance the last dance with sweet lady death, but the life that leads to that is what defines ones' contentedness
with death and the last dance.
Bring in the details! IMAGINE!
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| Re: A hangman's moaning by Moauram |
27-Mar-13/8:25 PM |
It is the TOOL that suffers, fool. Not he who utilizes it. Ever seen the pen/pencil run out? Yeah, that's you.
And no, no one can see your mind except the asshole at the morgue. Till then "one must speak his/her mind."
You speak it like crap. The final stare of darkness would make a mind brittle... yet you're still alive.
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| Re: A hangman's moaning by Moauram |
27-Mar-13/8:26 PM |
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Oh, or the crazy mofo that kills you and opens your skull!
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| Re: Cannikin by Caducus |
27-Mar-13/8:36 PM |
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