regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-03/8:09 PM
it's too bad you descend so completely into cliche. you have something. you just don't really expore it. too bad.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-03/8:09 PM
ditto
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-03/8:10 PM
or at least a half a beer undrunk, unspilt, under the coffee table.
Re: canto di desiderio by Bill Z Bub	8-Sep-03/10:17 PM
ah, bill! i wish i could hear you speak this.
Re: The Killing Festival Anthem by William Delacroix	15-Sep-03/11:23 AM
my NEH-EH-AME is z, and this ain't me.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Sep-03/11:57 AM
ouchies.
Re: naive gazer by richa	16-Sep-03/11:58 AM
richa!! give me verb, oh please, oh please: "And if he should swap his stars with words, his eyes for a mouth as pale as a painted stage-prop lantern."
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Sep-03/12:37 AM
sweet, tint. 'To dive below and find for you The perfect pearl within a parted life' damn. nice job. i disagree with jbh abot the opak reference--i think it does, as you intended, imply their differences. i'll come read it again in the morning. but, damn, this is fine.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Sep-03/8:18 AM
hmm. good, but the rhythm needs work.
Re: Inner-city parish by richa	18-Sep-03/8:53 AM
nice job.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Sep-03/3:44 PM
ah, margaret. i wish you the best in your future. i am sure you reach people, out there. but knowing your audience is the best way to do it. poemranker is not the audience you were after. we floss with barbed wire, round here. be well, margaret, and may you find what you are looking for. z
Re: >~{In the Shadow of a Crooked Ceiling}~< by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	25-Sep-03/6:52 PM
bravo! it is refreshing to see that some of the rankers are making use of the more modern conventions. a fine prose-pome indeed, sirrah! -2 for cerical (sic) errors.
Re: (fragment) by razorgrin	25-Sep-03/6:57 PM
wound copper. tricksy, he is. he watches us, yess, he does.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Sep-03/7:09 PM
that last line's a sucker punch, richa. it does not feel like it is yours to write. if this is your new voice, grow into it in the prior 7 lines. (but i rather prefer the first 7 to the 8th.)
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Sep-03/7:10 PM
well, no wonder he didn't swallow! his bounce is all off-beat. (ouch.)
Re: Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise	25-Sep-03/7:21 PM
i c what you mean, sir.
Re: Wasted Words by ho_hum	26-Sep-03/7:10 AM
you, sir, have wasted your commas, as well. but you turned a nice trick with the similie.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Sep-03/12:53 PM
what about on the wall? under the table? ON THE FURNITURE!!!! come to your senses, man!!!
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Sep-03/12:54 PM
where is the alcohol? this was all accomplished without a crutch?
Re: Ode to the Renesis by INTRANSIT	26-Sep-03/12:55 PM
nice one.