| Re: The Messenger (The Unreplaceable And Greatly Missed Mr. Mercury) by anagram |
16-Aug-02/9:12 PM |
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then again, maybe i'm a stalker.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
16-Aug-02/9:13 PM |
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| Re: fear by pitchblackdisaster |
17-Aug-02/8:33 AM |
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f-babe, do a search. how old are you, anyway, that you don't know that the silver platter is a myth? ah, i see, you do not realize that you are guided from the depths...
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| Re: fear by pitchblackdisaster |
17-Aug-02/9:09 AM |
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if the desire is great enough, you will find a way to know it. always, there is a price for knowledge
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| Re: Selective Alopecia by Ming T. Merciless |
17-Aug-02/9:10 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
17-Aug-02/9:12 AM |
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rip off. and completely undeveloped.
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| Re: ''*Night*'' by youngweirdo |
17-Aug-02/9:16 AM |
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twinkle twinkle little "*Night*"/how you fill me with such fright/air is hot but wind is cold/rhymes are obvious, subject, old/writer of "*Night*" please try again/ this time don't consult your friends.
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| Re: lover rock by roses are read |
17-Aug-02/9:43 AM |
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"but you're involved" this bit trips it up. last 2 lines need to be re-written. other than that, very tight.
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| Re: Earthly Delights? by razorgrin |
17-Aug-02/10:34 AM |
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razor-i like the way you take me there, but it feels uneven when i say it aloud. i want to be hyp-mo-tized by it, and in shock, look down at my larval body. consider a re-write?
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| Re: Earthly Delights? by razorgrin |
17-Aug-02/12:00 PM |
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madness spawns many ideas. hieronymus himself was a tad tetched. still, there is much good to be had here, and an edit would prolly do it right.
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| Re: The story of the myopic fishwife OR She: A muse t' me by ==Doylum |
17-Aug-02/9:53 PM |
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| Re: The story of the myopic fishwife OR She: A muse t' me by ==Doylum |
17-Aug-02/10:02 PM |
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i'll be happier when the capon's home to roost. put your masterpiece back up, if you like. i laughed my ass off when i saw the title o' this one.
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| Re: Selective Alopecia by Ming T. Merciless |
17-Aug-02/10:12 PM |
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so that's what that tickling sensation was...
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| Re: The story of the myopic fishwife OR She: A muse t' me by ==Doylum |
17-Aug-02/10:16 PM |
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don't you mean cisternian?
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| Re: The story of the myopic fishwife OR She: A muse t' me by ==Doylum |
17-Aug-02/10:26 PM |
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well if the cistercians are cisternian, i suspect they'd wear brown ones.... or maybe a brownish yellow, due to all the vegetables last night?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
17-Aug-02/10:32 PM |
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babbit, this one is weaker than your others. i don't think you've worked out the transitions in it yet; it does flow, but the ideas seem flotsam and jetsam in the strem here. perhaps breaks between leaf/daughter, shapes/platte, and old days/drink? i don't know; it just seems unfinished when held up to your others.
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| Re: The story of the myopic fishwife OR She: A muse t' me by ==Doylum |
17-Aug-02/10:33 PM |
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and the crustaceans are going wilde
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| Re: sky by youngweirdo |
18-Aug-02/5:51 AM |
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you tried harder with this one, but you're still not saying anything.
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| Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles |
18-Aug-02/5:58 AM |
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shouldn't 'sweet' be SWEET?
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| Re: ''*Night*'' by youngweirdo |
18-Aug-02/5:59 AM |
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oh, i get it, it's just meant to waste our time. SAY SOMETHING, DAMMIT
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