| Re: love song by <~> |
15-Aug-02/1:19 PM |
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i play. i wondered whether to post it, thus conjuring hordes of butterflies and diaries and whutknot. i took the chance. we shall see what comes of it....
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| Re: love song by <~> |
15-Aug-02/6:07 PM |
fun with shapes!!! fun with shapes!!! it's not meant to be serious, except maybe to seriously stir things up. shape poems remind me of making paperchains with construction paper--just don't eat too much paste. so, it's a silly shape, with a little naughtiness thrown in for good measure. it's been a while, so a body gets to thinking...musical instruments notwithstanding. man, i'm almost sorry i started this. almost. all in good fun, lads. and i hardly consider myself a 'mature poet'. by the variety of stuff i am posting here one might postulate that i am experimenting. you see, when you are a -=Dark_ master, you don't have to stick to form; you can break it to make your point. and what a fine upright point has been made there. nice and thick. i'm sure p&k is all-over jealous: a triangle, and now a violin for me, and, for the master, a sturdy flesh obelisk. "ce n'est pas une pipe." go team!
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| Re: love song by <~> |
15-Aug-02/6:24 PM |
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no, i think it was Frass who referred to the "the 'mature' poets and phlegm hockers" , and i figured he was drawing a line between us. i don't recall any phlegm poems from you, (which seems a shame), although he has praised what i have posted on the site. (he even called 'white harvest' dickensian, of which you surely were aware when you titled your 'piece.') glad i have fans. that's not why i do it. the mishapen business--the way you trailed it off at the end... i did not think you were mocking me; i thought you were tongue-in-cheeking the form.
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| Re: love song by <~> |
15-Aug-02/6:34 PM |
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no, i'm sorry doylum. you only get to watch. as you know, i'm only attracted to men who abuse me. that's the real reason i can't face my creditors at the reckoning.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
15-Aug-02/7:09 PM |
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if you insist, songster: 1) it communicates an idea in a novel way 2) it uses an accepted form (concrete: A Concrete poem is a conglomeration of words (sometimes one word repeated over and over) whose overall shape is a key to the concept it presents. There are no truly agreed-upon conventions, but a natural elegance of arrangement is often striven for.) and 3) because the author calls it one.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
15-Aug-02/7:10 PM |
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again, with the putting words in my mouth. doylum, you're jealous aren't you?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
15-Aug-02/7:20 PM |
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well, i had to please, after i so sorely let you down with my non-specifically shaped letters poem. sorry to use the shrine of the holy dick of jesu as a forum, -=Dark_Angel=-. may jesu save us all.
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| Re: Daughter by pkdrunner |
15-Aug-02/7:40 PM |
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| Re: The Ballet Studio by Corey McHattan |
16-Aug-02/6:24 AM |
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oh. oh. i like the way this poem mixes sugar and spice and crawling skin. very uncomfortable.
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16-Aug-02/10:52 AM |
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i like the analogy: the map, the grandfather. the image is a snapshot of a memory, nostalgic with not a trace of saccharine. nice job.
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16-Aug-02/11:01 AM |
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the wheels pound-pounding, common time: i like the way you both allude to AND set the rhythm of this pice in motion in the first stanza. i feel it in my eardrums, me like a peeping tom stowed away in the back seat, following you on this journey. thanks for taking me along.
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| Re: love song by <~> |
16-Aug-02/11:14 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
16-Aug-02/11:22 AM |
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hey funk, take a look around. this is a criticism site. express YOUR OWN opinion. don't speak for others. that is all.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
16-Aug-02/11:46 AM |
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the minions have spoken!!! AINSI SOIT IL!
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| Re: love song by <~> |
16-Aug-02/11:50 AM |
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i'm sorry h. i can't forgive you. now everyone will know. it's over between us (all except the sex, that is.) damn. it was so good while it lasted, too. <sigh> adieu, ma chere. adieu....
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16-Aug-02/12:06 PM |
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tiny?!? obviously you haven't been bung-surfing since i got ahold of sassy scotty.
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16-Aug-02/12:11 PM |
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you may be a charlatan and a hack, but yer still 'someone special', like a sock with a hole in it that has roses for eye, and drinks too much merlot in the wee hours...hey, pass the bottle, hackmaster
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| Re: love song by <~> |
16-Aug-02/12:13 PM |
maybe we are. resistance is futile. you will be assimilated.
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| Re: The Messenger (The Unreplaceable And Greatly Missed Mr. Mercury) by anagram |
16-Aug-02/7:54 PM |
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i always loved freddie too. miss his voice.
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| Re: The Messenger (The Unreplaceable And Greatly Missed Mr. Mercury) by anagram |
16-Aug-02/9:11 PM |
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ogle ogle ogle ogle. oops. sorry. got stuck there for a minute. hey p&k, for one who claims they can't follow me, you and i sure do find each other often enough. maybe doylum was right, and i am having a tryst. maybe it's with you...
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