Re: Grace by Win	19-Aug-02/6:45 PM
this is tender, and sweet. lucky you.
Re: purple by youngweirdo	19-Aug-02/6:46 PM
this poem damages my thaughts.
Re: Posing A 'mission (A Haiku Triad) by gay	19-Aug-02/6:51 PM
ha ha! the blade turns to me! parry away, sir. you have met your match! (well done)
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/6:55 PM
why, p&k! you surprise me! i will read this one again. i liked it very much after a first glance. nice job. your other stuff seems shallow, paired with this pithy (and maybe a little self-pitying, which is understandable) piece.
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/7:06 PM
p&k--who were you referring to? i most certainly did not give you a 0.
Re: Why Me? by Tarquin De La Bog	19-Aug-02/7:08 PM
t de la b, you were really going for a zero here, weren't you? you're not getting one from me, D.
Re: the toxic noise by fleshpedler	19-Aug-02/7:10 PM
is this another mask? you know who you are. y or n?
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Aug-02/7:14 PM
DA, your meter trips itself in several places. you are capable of so much more. i am disappointed.
Re: Heavenly HOst! by gay	19-Aug-02/7:16 PM
unholy desires, indeed. did blake help you with this? no, wait, it shows a sense of humor. he couldn't have had a hand in this one.
Re: Devil, BEWARE!!! by gay	19-Aug-02/7:18 PM
uh oh. looks like there's someone more l33t than D.A. in the house....
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/7:22 PM
h! A 10? methinks the merlot might be gracing you with winegoggles. it's good, but not quite there yet. something is missing to make it a 10. still, after a second read, it holds its head high.
Re: the toxic noise by fleshpedler	19-Aug-02/7:25 PM
you keep trying on different personas...and there are some ideas broached here...not fully developed...but, then again, your narratives are always immediate, fleshy, salty...which is why this one confused me. whose ever it is is stabbing at metaphysics, but has not lasted their 8 seconds in the flux as yet
Re: panic by <~>	19-Aug-02/7:27 PM
yes. hind-sight is 20/20, and 2-ply. indeed it is.
Re: To You, In Warmer Climes by <~>	19-Aug-02/7:51 PM
babbit--i have taken your suggestions re: the articles in the first stanza. thanks. it think it improves the poem. -z
Re: A Tender Kiss by Jody Conn	19-Aug-02/9:06 PM
it almost seems as though you are using this as a mantra to convince yourself that what you two have will finally save you...
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Aug-02/9:10 PM
<<Why does I have not find>> what? who? or, most importantly, WHY? why does I have to read this? why does the author torture me so? <<But how, till when , who can help me ?>> did you hear that out there, WHO CAN HELP ME????
Re: Heavenly HOst! by gay	19-Aug-02/9:13 PM
nor can he walk on land. gills be damned, toss this one in the...can...
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Aug-02/7:35 AM
yes. it simply must. heed the dark one's wishes. change the title.
Re: Secret, Admirer by <~>	20-Aug-02/7:41 AM
this is a second draft, and i am not happy with it. suggestions, please? i seem to have lost my way with it.
Re: Once Sought by necroscope7	20-Aug-02/7:44 AM
the ending seems a little clumsy to me, esp. 'the wrong place for each'. i get the sense that these things you sought were all about, yet you focused on where you wanted to find them, unwilling to see them beside you. yes?