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A Tender Kiss (Free verse) by Jody Conn A tender kiss and touch she gives
My emptiness is gone
I lose myself
within her eyes
My heart is filled with song
A tender kiss and touch
she gives
My emptiness is gone
This angel with the golden hair
This one,
she makes me strong
A tender kiss and touch she gives
My emptiness is
gone
My path today, from this point on
I'll never walk alone
A tender
kiss and touch she gives
My emptiness is gone
The passions that we share
in life
Unite and make us strong
jc021401
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:19 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:19 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.891782 Overall Rank: 1479 Comments:
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22-Jun-01/1:29 PM
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the full repetition of half the poem is a bit much for me; one line out of four would have sat better, or (same, ish) two every eight... very sweet, though. I'm sure whomever it was for appreciated it. :)
Nice, but needs a progression or juxtaposition
sweet...
aww...
This reminds me of Catullus. I liked it.
more pointless lesbian trivia...wow! you're so brave to be outright gay and proud. unite.unite carprt munchers unite..we've been repressed by phallic symbols and the "man" for too long, lets worship the stink of true love and vaginad tongu flicks...leonard cohen would break his guitar over your head in spanishy bound exctasy.g
more pointless lesbian trivia...wow! you're so brave to be outright gay and proud. unite.unite carprt munchers unite..we've been repressed by phallic symbols and the "man" for too long, lets worship the stink of true love and vaginad tongu flicks...leonard cohen would break his guitar over your head in spanishy bound exctasy.g
it almost seems as though you are using this as a mantra to convince yourself that what you two have will finally save you...
hey z ...let me guess? you were eating huh...hope it is was good.. we all deserve a great meal after the trials of the remedial day...i'd love to cook for you and introduce you to my family and friends if you're ever in my neck of the woods, just say so, i'll put you up for a few nights...and show some of the better aspects of la. glad you got home safe...your friend h....o
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