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A Tender Kiss (Free verse) by Jody Conn

A tender kiss and touch she gives My emptiness is gone I lose myself within her eyes My heart is filled with song A tender kiss and touch she gives My emptiness is gone This angel with the golden hair This one, she makes me strong A tender kiss and touch she gives My emptiness is gone My path today, from this point on I'll never walk alone A tender kiss and touch she gives My emptiness is gone The passions that we share in life Unite and make us strong jc021401

anonymous 22-Jun-01/1:29 PM
the full repetition of half the poem is a bit much for me; one line out of four would have sat better, or (same, ish) two every eight... very sweet, though. I'm sure whomever it was for appreciated it. :)




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