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Once Sought (Free verse) by necroscope7
Once sought I the source of joy Scouring hill, valley, and dale But the joy I found at the end of my search Was old and used and stale Once sought I the source of love Where'er it might like to hide But when I found it amongst the woodlands It seemed that love had died Once sought I the source of life Struggling, straining to reach But when I reached the summit of life All there was was a rotten peach Once sought me joy, love, and life To give me the gifts that each could But I was searching the wrong place for each And did not perceive them where I should

Up the ladder: Oh well, shit happens
Down the ladder: love is..

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.2
Weighted score: 4.6
Overall Rank: 12523
Posted: June 6, 2002 7:48 AM PDT; Last modified: June 6, 2002 7:48 AM PDT
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Comments:
[3] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 20-Aug-02/6:56 AM | Reply
So where were they? Buried with W.H. Davies?
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 20-Aug-02/7:44 AM | Reply
the ending seems a little clumsy to me, esp. 'the wrong place for each'. i get the sense that these things you sought were all about, yet you focused on where you wanted to find them, unwilling to see them beside you. yes?
[5] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 | 12-Nov-03/6:49 PM | Reply
Easy there kid. Perhaps next time try it with clothes on.
[5] oneglove @ 205.133.194.234 | 14-Oct-04/7:38 PM | Reply
dont try so hard to make things rhyme but i like the set up
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