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Free verse № 2742

Once Sought

Member since 2002 · Posted 6 Jun 2002 · 4 comments

Once sought I the source of joy Scouring hill, valley, and dale But the joy I found at the end of my search Was old and used and stale Once sought I the source of love Where'er it might like to hide But when I found it amongst the woodlands It seemed that love had died Once sought I the source of life Struggling, straining to reach But when I reached the summit of life All there was was a rotten peach Once sought me joy, love, and life To give me the gifts that each could But I was searching the wrong place for each And did not perceive them where I should

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4 comments

[3] Christof 20-Aug-02/6:56 AM Reply
So where were they? Buried with W.H. Davies?
[n/a] <~> 20-Aug-02/7:44 AM Reply
the ending seems a little clumsy to me, esp. 'the wrong place for each'. i get the sense that these things you sought were all about, yet you focused on where you wanted to find them, unwilling to see them beside you. yes?
[5] horus8 12-Nov-03/6:49 PM Reply
Easy there kid. Perhaps next time try it with clothes on.
[5] oneglove 14-Oct-04/7:38 PM Reply
dont try so hard to make things rhyme but i like the set up