replying on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america
7 Mar 2003, 3:47 PM
So let me get this straight, toby. Considering you seem to be about 100 different people in your head clique and wired many ranking powers, am I to believe that the only way I can get any real advice around this place is if I like all of your poems. What an interesting policy. And If I accidentally do not like one of the poems you wrote under any number of your user names I am to be labeled numerous form of creative profanity because you cannot seem to take any sort of criticism. Well okay then, just give me a list of all your people and I will give them all good tidings! lol.
on Unholy War by marvelis
7 Mar 2003, 3:31 PM
Lots of cliches. Lots of them.
replying on Keanu Vs The mystery of life by Shardik
7 Mar 2003, 3:28 PM
Okay, quickdraw, you are right. I will go back and try to add depth that is not beneath you.
replying on Keanu Vs The mystery of life by Shardik
7 Mar 2003, 3:17 PM
I think any critique I give is only an opinion, which is my own and I do believe I have a right to that regardless.
replying on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america
7 Mar 2003, 3:14 PM
I am not sure what you are talking about. Sounds more like rambling. But thanks.
replying on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america
7 Mar 2003, 3:13 PM
Okay, thank you. But I believe you have mistaken the Muslim religion for Hinduism. Bangladesh is 80 percent Muslim. The rest is divided between a hodgepodge of Buddhism, Christianity, Hinduism (or the dot head as you call it), among others. Some even tribal. The woman is question is neither of these, although I believe she was raised Lutheran. She teaches for the International American School. Just to give you a heads up. But considering the poem does deal with assumed stereotypes, I will cut you a bit of slack for the dot head comment.
replying on Keanu Vs The mystery of life by Shardik
7 Mar 2003, 3:09 PM
You said I was a good poet? You just called me a fuck face.
replying on The deafening silence in the world or something by Bachus
7 Mar 2003, 3:07 PM
I am not sure what this means, but this site is filled with all sorts of friendly folks that cannot seem to take a ranking or any sort of criticism. It is just my opinion. Lighten up and try to avoid the profanity, please. I realsie you are trying to make a political state, but it is rather ineffective and severely tainted by the fact that you rely on Depeche (sp?) Mode to achieve a political counter point.
on The deafening silence in the world or something by Bachus
7 Mar 2003, 2:50 PM
It is pretty bad when you have to end you work with a quote from a song.
on The Blooding by Mr Pig
7 Mar 2003, 2:45 PM
Some good wording, but it suffers a loss of imagery toward the end and the metaphor you implement becomes weak and tired. You might cut down on the heady language and quit telling so much. At least that is what I would do. but it is still decent in some regards.
on if only you could read my mind love by sk8boardandpoems
7 Mar 2003, 2:33 PM
This sounds like you are actually attempting to write a childish poem.
on Keanu Vs The mystery of life by Shardik
7 Mar 2003, 2:31 PM
Pretty pointless and off the mark for a haiku. Sorry.
replying on Something for Lynn by Jeremi B. Handrinos
7 Mar 2003, 12:37 PM
did you write this poem? i guess i am confused? sorry, i am not trying to be a better writer than anyone. and i think it odd that you are trying to influence a personal opinion. i thought we were supposed to give poems a number rank. that is all i did, but here you go.
replying on Something for Lynn by Jeremi B. Handrinos
7 Mar 2003, 12:06 PM
sorry, i wasn't trying to be negative. i was just saying what i thought. i didn't realise you were four and wrote this. i guess it is good then.
on Love spank by Shardik
7 Mar 2003, 11:44 AM
funny and completely worthless at the same time.
on Something for Lynn by Jeremi B. Handrinos
7 Mar 2003, 10:33 AM
almost there. still a little young.