| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-Jan-05/6:50 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-Jan-05/6:53 PM |
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This is sooooo... not a pimple
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| Re: War Story by dougsoderstrom |
8-Jan-05/6:55 PM |
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Have you ever heard of the difference between a letter and a poem?
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| Re: War Story by dougsoderstrom |
8-Jan-05/7:05 PM |
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"Moslem, becoming," just few typos, lots of forest gump rip offs, and a couple of rereads where spacing and metaphors, and spell check come into play
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| Re: Existential questions by kawakurdi |
9-Jan-05/4:10 PM |
Forced rhyme helps drive it well.
<3 Jason
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| Re: Draw Me A Pretty Picture by cuddlytiger17 |
9-Jan-05/4:20 PM |
Damn, what I wouldn't give for a drunken down on his luck suicidal wino right now, a crayon, and some extra copies of this this to draw on the back of in case he has a couple of buddies :0
In other words, very moving
<3 Jason
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10-Jan-05/10:29 AM |
Now thats, exactly how how it feels to be drowning in busy!
<3 Jason
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| Re: The Poet's Plight by dougsoderstrom |
10-Jan-05/10:32 AM |
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First verse, loved/magical things were expected, and then second and third were like I got shit on while pondering the beautiful imagine lain before.
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10-Jan-05/10:36 AM |
We all tell ourselves that, but come on, the truth is written right in front of your face. Safety does not equal happy, much less love.
*Smiles, realizes who he is and that if anyone has no right to go into love speals, just sighs*
<3 Jason
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10-Jan-05/10:41 AM |
Good Idea, but...
A) if your using Home as Heaven
A1)Figure should be more *Insert You Diety here*
A2)Go over the whole there may or may not have been footsteps left in the beach behind, and I may or may not have asked whose they where.
In other words sound like those Damn Things outside of Rest Rooms.
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| Re: The Wall is Crying by daggatolar |
10-Jan-05/10:44 AM |
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Harsh on the thought required to so much as understand what the fuck your talking about. No Offense. Thought it was bad ass as far as Imagines, but I draw no real meaning out of this. -8- for now.
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| Re: Poemranker I Couldn't stay Away by Tara57 |
10-Jan-05/6:27 PM |
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Wow, looks like you got hit by the harsher side of the ranker.
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| Re: In The Beginning by Dovina |
16-Jan-05/1:38 AM |
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| Re: Conjugate the verb by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
21-Jan-05/11:23 PM |
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Hows can you even consider this to be free verse. More like "other", or perhaps, Caged Verse. Either way, I thought it was crap. But eh? What do I know.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
26-Jan-05/2:35 PM |
Love it, I'd forgot I'd written it until you dug it up from my xanga. Now its the become a short story Idea. Thanks.
<3 Jason
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
31-Jan-05/12:10 PM |
Inspiration can come from anything
Thrill, only because I'm always seeking
Movement occurs at the whimsy of wishful thinking
Motivation comes from your hearts desire
Touches can be terrible liars
Freedom is a tight rope balancing act, fun but scary
Comfort Lies within the company of smiles
Excited, I can it in your voice
Completely dazzling as I am stunning
Challenges of Art and Intellect are my day
Seeing is Believing that everyone has depths and shadows
Entertaining by fake smile over top of real grins
I want someone
Who isn't seeking passion
Brilliant Brightly Beaming
My Eyes Burn
Only to cool
Not Yet, Convince Me
<3 Jason
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| Re: Psalm of Wonder by Dovina |
31-Jan-05/12:17 PM |
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I disagree. It does work on an emotional level.
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3-Feb-05/6:32 PM |
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| Re: Orion takes aim by oneglove |
13-Feb-05/11:11 AM |
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Give him about 4 more months, he'll at least have it running south. -9-
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
19-Feb-05/1:52 AM |
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Improvement on the original by far.
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