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The Wall is Crying (Free verse) by daggatolar tears can no longer be water
to sea
The wall is crying
our eyes inability to see
our bodies sealed -in not drinking
unable to wet we curse water
to stones to eat sand
only to haul all our land
lives on the bare floor
of a concrete solid flood
and tears can no longer be water
but bodies dripping
to a drying desert dripping
to see the sandback to sea
the wall is crying
and the sun is bleeding
red eye
Up the ladder:
the Dreamer
Down the ladder:
Lunch Box Treasure Hunt
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Posted: January 10, 2005 3:41 AM PST; Last modified: January 10, 2005 3:41 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7921 Comments:
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.161.179.254
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10-Jan-05/10:44 AM
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Harsh on the thought required to so much as understand what the fuck your talking about. No Offense. Thought it was bad ass as far as Imagines, but I draw no real meaning out of this. -8- for now.
As an excercise try to take out exactly half the words - gives you something like fourty to work with.
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