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The Wall is Crying (Free verse) by daggatolar
tears can no longer be water to sea The wall is crying our eyes inability to see our bodies sealed -in not drinking unable to wet we curse water to stones to eat sand only to haul all our land lives on the bare floor of a concrete solid flood and tears can no longer be water but bodies dripping to a drying desert dripping to see the sandback to sea the wall is crying and the sun is bleeding red eye

Up the ladder: When Did You Walk Away?
Down the ladder: Whispers the Pariah

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7919
Posted: January 10, 2005 3:41 AM PST; Last modified: January 10, 2005 3:41 AM PST
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[8] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.161.179.254 | 10-Jan-05/10:44 AM | Reply
Harsh on the thought required to so much as understand what the fuck your talking about. No Offense. Thought it was bad ass as far as Imagines, but I draw no real meaning out of this. -8- for now.
[7] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.51 | 11-Jan-05/2:26 PM | Reply
As an excercise try to take out exactly half the words - gives you something like fourty to work with.

Try it.
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