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The Wall is Crying (Free verse) by daggatolar

tears can no longer be water to sea The wall is crying our eyes inability to see our bodies sealed -in not drinking unable to wet we curse water to stones to eat sand only to haul all our land lives on the bare floor of a concrete solid flood and tears can no longer be water but bodies dripping to a drying desert dripping to see the sandback to sea the wall is crying and the sun is bleeding red eye

Shuushin 11-Jan-05/2:26 PM
As an excercise try to take out exactly half the words - gives you something like fourty to work with.

Try it.




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