| Re: I Am(Defined) by lil cindy lu who |
27-May-03/5:58 PM |
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Meh, I have a hard time relating each stanza to the others execept 1 and 4. -6- But only cause I see room for improvement.
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27-May-03/6:01 PM |
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Lame and sounds like it was made by a 4th grader, as a joke to make his friends laugh.
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| Re: Blush Of The Winter Rose by kassanna |
27-May-03/6:18 PM |
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Yes Roses are out dated but nowhere other than the title does it actually say rose. I think Its a little harash to say that they'll Never write that well Bachus, I mean hey who knows? I give this a -7- cause its not bad but is a bit cliche(no offense), even tho you did the cliche well, I'm afraid I've seen better.
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27-May-03/6:22 PM |
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I thought the first line repeation really made it work well together -9-
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30-May-03/7:58 AM |
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LOL Makes me never want to piss you off.
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30-May-03/8:22 AM |
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And what has the meaning of Cauliflower = Cauliflower have a thing to do with the price of tea in China?
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31-May-03/3:23 PM |
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Issues, No More like Volumes LoL
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2-Jun-03/2:05 PM |
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Worst thing you've ever wrote, but the dedication, to D.A. and J.H. Was almost funny. No offense ment but this sux. -2-
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| Re: Stealing lightning from the pulpit by horus8 |
2-Jun-03/2:12 PM |
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2-Jun-03/2:26 PM |
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One hundred forty two, yesterday, the middle of nowhere
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2-Jun-03/3:14 PM |
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| Re: Blinded by lunar |
2-Jun-03/4:13 PM |
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3-Jun-03/9:25 AM |
Good Luck Kim and Tek, I wish you well, sorry you decided to call it quits, but thats how things turn out I guess, hoping you'll change your minds but not expecting it...
-Jason-
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| Re: Jeremi B. Handrinos: Part 2 by wCUNTw |
5-Jun-03/2:46 PM |
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| Re: wish by daniella |
5-Jun-03/2:49 PM |
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| Re: Triolet, for Jason by beakism |
6-Jun-03/2:10 PM |
Speaking without Knowledge, isn't that what your mocking me for here? I do Happen to know about Libel and Slander, and copyright protections. I may not be a lawyer but as a DJ for a radio station I have to know about such things.
So next time you assume someone has no clue what the hell they are talking about, make sure they don't.
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| Re: One Night Stand by Audaciouslilgrl |
13-Jun-03/10:41 AM |
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I suggest replacing farce with charade, and instead of Of a wishful ache, I'd go with With a wishful. <- I think that it goes better with the momentary release.
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13-Jun-03/11:00 AM |
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More Angels???... well much as I'm not a fan of Angels I admit I like this. Extremely well in fact. -8-
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| Re: Advise by Audaciouslilgrl |
13-Jun-03/11:07 AM |
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You really over did it at the end with all the OO ryhmes. I think you should take Rob's Advice and Read some more poetry, cause we see alot of cliche poems here. Its not too bad a poem but maybe next time forget the ryhme and just say what your trying to say.
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| Re: So Simple by Audaciouslilgrl |
13-Jun-03/11:10 AM |
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You forgot teaching your dog to fetch with dynomite and then then lighting the fuse. -6-
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