| Re: a comment on Tropical afternoon by cpill |
18-Jun-07/4:39 PM |
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Yes perhaps thats the wrong word to use. I wanted to convey that hot and "flushed" (perhaps a better word than hot) feeling or the end of hard emotion, like I would imagine a female menstruation. An though you feel the sticky wet as a a discomfort its actually like the cold rain at the end of a hot day.
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| Re: a comment on Today could be the last day by cpill |
13-Jul-06/2:10 AM |
DAG! A typeo. I can't believe I didn't see that. If I edit I lose these comments :( Guess it stays.
"Whims..." line was intended to reflect on the "People", the every day us, and how we allow ourselves to victims of circumstance.
The theme, I guess, is about awareness of the moment. Awareness of life/time passing. It could be the last day for the narrator as it could be the last day for us all, and with that as the back drop to experience, even the ordinary seems crisp and alive.
Thanks for your comment (and correction!), I'd not really analysed it much until now.
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| Re: ME AGAIN by oldschool |
12-Jul-06/2:50 PM |
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| Re: Relief (Ventilation Shaft rewrite) by cyan9 |
27-Jan-06/7:22 AM |
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| Re: Send The Devil... by horus8 |
20-Nov-05/6:59 AM |
My my you grow like a coral reef
And I will always want to cut me feet
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| Re: a comment on cup-cake by cpill |
26-Jun-05/5:55 AM |
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You can lead a horse to water...
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| Re: a comment on cup-cake by cpill |
25-Jun-05/1:40 AM |
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I guess its not very linier, more felt than understood.
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| Re: Emotionally Unavailable by horus8 |
24-Jun-05/6:58 PM |
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| Re: For Katrina by BiggRobb |
24-Apr-05/1:43 PM |
Constantly, never acting
Hiding
I, can, never, get,
courage?
Even if I find it, I wonât know how to use it
So inexperienced eats
behind crowds
I lag, they move
everyday,
more, more I want
time Reminded all of you
How to deal?
I can't look in your face.
I walk behind
won't speak, The words come
you leave
why won't I chance Another missed?
Constantly...
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| Re: Escapism by vulcan |
24-Apr-05/1:27 PM |
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| Re: Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8 |
10-Apr-05/11:37 AM |
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| Re: Harvest by Bachus |
19-Aug-04/4:00 AM |
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| Re: Teen Machine by unknown |
14-Aug-02/11:28 PM |
I like the imagery, the choice of nouns. I'm curious what the inspiration for it was?
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