| Re: a comment on INDECENCY by TanHand |
9-Apr-03/11:20 AM |
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Yesuh ma'am I sures do. Could you please be as kind as to tell me where the Rilke books is? WHORE
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| Re: Oh holy shit by Lucifer |
25-Feb-03/5:10 AM |
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2 (how bad did you want that?)
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| Re: We by Nanshe |
25-Feb-03/4:26 AM |
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My advice to all decent haiku authors is: abondon the haiku. If you want to keep things very short, images very simple, do so, but frankly I don't see the value in this dogmatic 575 dealie, especially here. Try a 1 1 2 3 5 8 4 2 1. Or I will.
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| Re: a comment on He put a price on her head by Nanshe |
25-Feb-03/4:24 AM |
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"Usually I have a problem with diaphanous, overused poetry word" I'm not sure how true this is, but it is indescribably sad anyway.
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| Re: a comment on He put a price on her head by Nanshe |
25-Feb-03/4:23 AM |
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I have a diabetic sole :~(
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| Re: Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
24-Feb-03/9:12 PM |
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| Re: Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
24-Feb-03/8:55 PM |
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In responses to my comments, you have neglected to write anything about my comments on your poetry. Maybe when you address each feeble point I make I'll stop goading you. If this poem is such the fucking cat's pyjamas it won't take a minute.
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| Re: a comment on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
24-Feb-03/8:50 PM |
My point here is that I believe the poem would be more effective if it didn't try to bridge the gap between male whore experience and average experience by assuming that the reader can find some common ground to relate to. I feel that this search cheapens and weakens the poem. If the reader were unable to find common ground he or she would begin to comprehend the feeling that someone who has no common ground with anyone else feels, ie what a male prostitute dying alone in an indifferent world feels. My point here is that the sense of tragedy is lessened by the unimaginative delivery. All this poem does is say that some guy is dying under unfortunate circumstances and that he's sad. Big fucking deal I say. If the sole intent here is to make the reader feel sorry for this person, it wouldn't be much of a poem, even if it did manage to do that.
It's a fine poem, it just seems that if h8 feels so strongly about this, maybe he should do something interesting instead of something not too many tiers above your garden variety whiney girl poetry. The fact that it is about a male whore dying alone doesn't really distinguish it from those my girlfriend left me type things so universally scorned.
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| Re: a comment on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
24-Feb-03/8:40 PM |
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GANUS IS ME/SETTLE. YOU DUMB CUNT. LET IT GO. I AGREE TO DISAGREE ON THIS ONE, AND IF IT MEANS I'M AN EGOTISTICAL IDIOTIC WANKER SO BE IT, IT IS CONSOLATION ENOUGH KNOWING I DIDN'T WRITE THIS.
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| Re: a comment on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
23-Feb-03/4:28 PM |
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Note to TanHand, that'd be a good poem.
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| Re: a comment on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
23-Feb-03/4:27 PM |
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A broken heart is better than a heart that's left alone, silly, at least according to the NewOrder song. A broken heart is like a fistfight or The Stooges - horrible but life affirming.
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| Re: a comment on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
23-Feb-03/4:26 PM |
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Add some stilton and you'll be cooking with Ganus (this comment is funny on many different levels)
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| Re: a comment on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
23-Feb-03/4:25 PM |
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RHODE ISLAND IN THE HEEEOUSE. WARRICK. APPARENTLY THEY SUCKED AND THEN GOT REALLY REALLY HOT.
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| Re: a comment on A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again) |
23-Feb-03/3:00 PM |
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HA HA HA HA HA HA HA (x9)
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| Re: A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again) |
23-Feb-03/2:55 PM |
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i wish my mother wuz dead so i could write a poeme this beautiful..9..
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| Re: heathen love by w~* ATHENA *~w |
10-Jan-03/3:06 PM |
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| Re: lost love by cherish |
10-Jan-03/2:03 PM |
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I'd crank it up to 11 if I could dude. nice one, I know what ur going through.
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| Re: heathen love by w~* ATHENA *~w |
9-Jan-03/11:41 PM |
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| Re: Hector's such a drag by Bachus |
9-Jan-03/10:32 PM |
"My life consists of homework, meal preparation and recreation
(like poemranker)." (like poemranker)->(like the discus). That's a bit funnier I think.
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| Re: Hector's such a drag by Bachus |
9-Jan-03/10:29 PM |
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I thought you were gonna replace it with something else. I'm amazed you've turned this into such a masterpiece. I especially like how you took my obnoxious "I don't care bit" and said "I don't care that Jesus was a male Hustler. I don't care".
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