Re: I sat for an hour to watch a spider by Jimbo	30-Jul-03/4:24 PM
And those stupid fucking ~ ~ curly things sure doesn't fucking help your case, nor does your inventive way of spelling tom or when you wrote it (date time etc) unless you're dead or moonlighting from politics.
Re: Seeing Clearly in the Dark by Jimbo	30-Jul-03/7:40 PM
1. what does dew smell like? Precisely 2. Do you ever get the feeling that you're losing your grasp on the difference between too, and to, and two? 3."When I wake up in your bed I know I have been dreaming". probably the most uninteresting observation I've ever had the disservice of witnessing. Congratulation. Somehow I get the feeling you're just a tiger in the sack, grrrrr. lol. [some number I've forgotten between 1 and 10 oh, 4.]"As the light collided with walls Hurting and cutting me deep" Jesus homer are you onto some bulbs we're all missing? just maybe. 5. "But tonight the sky is dark" Another brilliant observation. You would be a great babysitter you could be like "well, the child was young and small"? well yeah? 6."And I had kissed you with my eyes Holding you tightly with my breath" David Copperfield, I will have you know, is cackeling at you, along with me, Jesus, The Devil, Carl Jung, and Castro(?). In other words, Thom, you could make Hallmark cry, but please spare me the trouble of making you cry, by belittling your most inappropriate attempts at poetry I've seen in weeks. Enjoy this and put it over your mantel. 'THEE MOST HONORABLE AWARD OF MERIT IN THE ART OF BEING INCONCEIVABLY REDUNDANT WITH EXTRAORDINARY GLEE IS BEQUEETHED UPON THEE AND YOU'S AND YOURS' Be blessed sir, there's a poet in you somewhere. Perhaps you should go watch hamburger hill and get those juices flowing, because sir, your poem was shat.
Re: I sat for an hour to watch a spider by Jimbo	30-Jul-03/8:41 PM
Also, why post a poem if you cannot respond sensibly to a critique. I raised some striking issues to you about where your poetry is going bad, and you respond like a child. I offer structural suggestions and basically, give you your solution on a silver platter, and a formula to work with to improve your poetry since we share mutual friends, and you insult me and disrespect me, over your half assed heinous mutilation of arachnids? You're a fool. There are people that would pay good money to have me give them a creative boost and share some of my techniques. You should listen to better poets when they share advice, it's the only way to learn, not act like a oversensitive spoiled degenerate, for future reference. The poets life is no place for the sensitive & or the spoiled charity case, my friend, remember that if fucking anything I've said. You can burn that one to your pink little brain old man.
regarding some deleted poem...	30-Jul-03/8:48 PM
Possibly the best thing, ever. I deem it the choicest read currently on this swollen whore's hole of a site by far. HA! what a fantastic poem, ha ha holy shit. 11!
Re: Too obvious by INTRANSIT	30-Jul-03/9:01 PM
Ha! Cheers.
Re: A Sullen Moon by Jimbo	31-Jul-03/11:25 AM
This is the poetry of a Jethro Tull fan with a shit happens T-shirt tied around their bald pot bellied head. You can find my e- mail on my homepage Einstein, and you can find out all you need to know about me with a good google. Let me know when your coming, I'll put out my wheel chair ramp and turn on the porch light.
Re: A Sullen Moon by Jimbo	31-Jul-03/11:43 AM
"On the night of the moon We kissed again with tears" As opposed to the night of the 'no moon' listing with beers? "Sorry at times you’ve crossed the threshold of grief" The last time I crossed the threshold of grief, I had to put my bride down for a minute to get my wheels over the molding. "Wanting to become you for brief moments To feel all that you feel and want all that you need You are the rose upon my bloom yes my Rose And gently I’d remove your petals like cloths" Wait a minute... Let me get out my Capt. Crunch decoder... yes, just as I suspected. You have a sever fear of rejection coupled by the weight of the idea that you are a burden to those around you that you love. Yet you are so full of pride and blinded by the American stereo type of what a father figure and a husband's supposed to be yo can barely sleep at night or look at yourself in the mirror. that's a horrible way for you to live man, and all in your mind. What a shame. have you tried viagra and just letting the past go? Well then again, you're not very bright I gather because of your inebility to locate my e-mail, or address to beat me up when it's in plain site, not to mention the fact that a child could, left handed, see where I live and who I am In seconds upon the web these days since that information isn't secret, or you could get my # from Z. Shit man there's all kinds of ways for you to beat me up, or are you as incompitent at problem solving as you are at poetry? Pardon me, my mother just called out to me for lunch, I'm five, I have to go now, today's peanut butter and jelly surprise. The surprise is MURDER. Yippe, and bye Tom.
Re: Ah ha ah ha by -=Tan_Hand=-	31-Jul-03/11:47 AM
Then she took off her wig and said FBI freeze pedo guido!
Re: I, Ann Boleyn by http://mulberryfairy	31-Jul-03/12:01 PM
Hilarious
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jul-03/3:58 PM
Could you possibly not inform me as to the current condition of your tampon, bless you, Rusty.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jul-03/4:01 PM
Good Christ, the way you suck is sheer genius, but pray tell, how exactly do you maintain your composure while writing from that deep within your craftless trance of idiocy?
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jul-03/4:05 PM
I will tell you this, because, I can't get over this poem is absolutely the most poorly written eye stab with a corked fork I've seen since Steve Martin bought me lettuce last week. My suggestion as the 666th best living poet ah alive, would be to make it a pimple poem and harvest the 10's sweet jesus, because, you will clean fucking house.
Re: I Hate Andy Jeon by JoyLuck	1-Aug-03/1:21 AM
A classic. Very intelligent, and uncompromisable. Really, friend, a beautiful, beautiful, tiny piece of magic.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-03/1:24 AM
Terrific structure and delivery. you're starting to do the chicky chaw baby, and that shit is fuuun. when poetry gets easy, shit happens,. for the good fight, yes, we are in it for the good fight..
Re: Oxywarmonger by poetandknowit	1-Aug-03/1:29 AM
Well, well... Looky where I am? Yes sir, on another one of your wordy fat assed cowems. If I hadn't of farted half way through reading this dedication to self loathing I probably would've cracked my head open nodding off into my my fucking moniter. Justly so, that deserves a seven in my book.
Re: A Lack of Care by William J. Mitchell	1-Aug-03/1:35 AM
I'm going to ask you whether or not my critique is worth your time. Too fucking bad. Here it is... Your poem is interesting and closes well, but your structure is really unreadable and off kilter, grammarilly and metricly speaking. Here's a 7. Enjoy your stay.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-03/1:40 AM
"And had instead assumed the penis or the pussy" I was hooting until here. Could I suggest this "And had instead assumed the penis could grow wings for vagina"? lol.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-03/1:43 AM
I had no idea you were into various humanitarian cliques, what a selfless soul you are. 9
Re: I, Ann Boleyn by http://mulberryfairy	1-Aug-03/1:54 AM
How someone could give a groaning dismount a zero is so fucking beyond me, here.
Re: Billy Bob Jo by Inconceivable_Dreams	1-Aug-03/2:07 AM
Yep.