poemranker ::Ah ha ah ha by -=Tan_Hand=-

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Ah ha ah ha

by -=Tan_Hand=-

Member since 2003 · Posted 31 Jul 2003 · Edited 29 Apr 2004 · 3 comments

Stood in line In the rain Got very wet My turn came No food left

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[6] http://mulberryfairy 31-Jul-03/9:48 AM Reply
I don't think "the pussy was sorry" is enough of a description of what justified the narrator's slap. More detail, too loose, bad rhythm, too sloppy? Haven't you seen the rhyming bumper stickers? "There is not excuse for domestic abuse"
[n/a] horus8 31-Jul-03/11:47 AM Reply
Then she took off her wig and said FBI freeze pedo guido!
[10] DrinkYouAway 29-Apr-04/5:42 PM Reply
Wow, very strong, very intimidating. This isnt what I was expecting at all. This is either from the perspective of a poor, or homeless man/woman/child. Intense, short and to the point. i give it a 10