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Ah ha ah ha (Concrete) by -=Tan_Hand=- Stood in line
In the rain
Got very wet
My turn came
No food left
Up the ladder:
RHYMEZONE.COM
Down the ladder:
I'll Save You The Effort
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Posted: July 31, 2003 9:38 AM PDT; Last modified: April 29, 2004 9:11 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 8013 Comments:
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http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.144.168
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31-Jul-03/9:48 AM
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I don't think "the pussy was sorry" is enough of a description of what justified the narrator's slap. More detail, too loose, bad rhythm, too sloppy? Haven't you seen the rhyming bumper stickers? "There is not excuse for domestic abuse"
Then she took off her wig and said FBI freeze pedo guido!
Wow, very strong, very intimidating. This isnt what I was expecting at all. This is either from the perspective of a poor, or homeless man/woman/child. Intense, short and to the point. i give it a 10
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