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Ah ha ah ha (Concrete) by -=Tan_Hand=-

Stood in line In the rain Got very wet My turn came No food left

http://mulberryfairy 31-Jul-03/9:48 AM
I don't think "the pussy was sorry" is enough of a description of what justified the narrator's slap. More detail, too loose, bad rhythm, too sloppy? Haven't you seen the rhyming bumper stickers? "There is not excuse for domestic abuse"




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