Re: pavement by faded	14-Sep-02/7:33 PM
Charming...if you're into humping cattle? hunp away. otay! 3/10/
Re: No sally, lay your troubles to bed by Crakyamuni	14-Sep-02/7:37 PM
unfortunately even the wise fat crosslegged one couldn't help this...better just go with satanmonk, or the inevitably vague and stronger monkfish. cereal dish? nay, nay! cereal is for bowls you twanker. 2/10.
Re: On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit	14-Sep-02/7:43 PM
typo on line six bros"you", possibly your?. is better. no?.. hows the cold. hope a bit better. pray tell. my son starts preschool this monday. wow. time flys when you're going broke. smoke?k
Re: I Dig a Ponytail by Doris & Oats by w~* ATHENA *~w	15-Sep-02/6:42 PM
maybe lose the, "or did we"? or bend the title to fit a little less crypticly? it's almost emotionaly unavailable...sorta self serving and perhaps a bit unique, but only to you...because it serves no purpose to the reader other than confusion...even if it makes all the sense in the world to you. to another its a bit neither here nor there.
Re: witch's bliss by crin	15-Sep-02/6:53 PM
puppy chow. help your puppy live a healthier life. then take him for long walks in china town.
Re: "Huh?...What?" by royalflesh	18-Sep-02/12:40 AM
that is quite a ride in its own right....do i know you ? something about your voice sounds familiar...ah.well probably just an echo flinch on the sun dial..do you dial...?????<impressive piece> be proud. sorry for being short this evening...i'm on antibiotics..and reeling from a lowballing attack of the parasitic kind, but the old orange peel saved the day...thank god for fruit...and more than one rib.y
Re: Raw Suicide by royalflesh	18-Sep-02/12:45 AM
for a few moments/Whistle fucking dixie. fiend/finger licking good/-=--unless i'm commenting on something written towards me...than..even better. i'll fucking chest puff the spear of artemis, and lick smile the shaft smooth...for a price..gardenias.
Re: Epitome of Pathetic by royalflesh	18-Sep-02/12:53 AM
this is weird, and d.a. i have no fucking clue who this person is so don't even bring me into this...still though, i can't help but wonder what kind of sick fucking conspiracy lies in ambush within this royaflesh sort here..i can smell something odd and metallic and shiny creeping through the curtains...be careful.rf.sometimes things work themselves out, but also more often deeper in....i am shallow...and/ i/ am /gone.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Sep-02/5:05 PM
in all honesty jeremi and horus8 are two completely seperate things....horus 8 is an character that i developed for an album and a grouping of writings, and images around which tell a 'fictitious' an story similiar to the who's tommy but on the internet operatic new age tecno-jazz improv level slam poetry for the smallville diss-illusioned...jeremi is an seperate issue altogether not a writer more of a homebody who looks nothing like or behaves anything like horus8 he reads, takes care of his son and spends time acting and performing on several various levels...horus8 is only jeremi's evil twin alter e-goed similiar to thad beaumont in the dark half and bachus was an even deeper off shoot of that, but they are 'characters' frozen in time and behavior..patterned..created...not moving forward in reality only through the context of the internet...otherwise..they go unmentioned and forgotten throughout jeremi's day....ask god's wife she knows everything...you cheeky bastard. i would shoot myself if i had to look like that..trust me.. that's the great thing about levels..one can never realy tell what's fiction and what's reality...for instance we all know you're realy miss Kentucky, but we're cool with that cuz you make up for your splendid face with priceless gems as the bullshit express. dick. p.s i'm realy just jaded and bitter it's all true bullshit..god i fucking love this web site poemrancor poemrancor POEMRANCOr! hooray.e
Re: Why... by livingcanvas	18-Sep-02/11:34 PM
priceless...atleast until next year..than i'm sure tara will introduce you to some of her publishing friends and hook you up with a cover letter...then you can be rich and aloof and brilliant..good luck! on the brilliant part..the rest comes with your circle of pikers...
Re: Grandma by waltfreakinwhitman	18-Sep-02/11:47 PM
that's the ace in the hole baby!
Re: Where the Heart is. by flatliner	18-Sep-02/11:56 PM
end it like , "it is a worn place" instead of it is my place. "to only me". otherwise..charming.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-02/12:01 AM
except the great water walk of 'jesu'. quite true.
Re: untitled#3 by darby pyn	19-Sep-02/12:05 AM
your title is either "tombstone podiums" or your last sentence or ofcourse rebridled#pee.
Re: I hate people by Bazilla	19-Sep-02/12:10 AM
i do hate you but this is hillarious.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-02/12:13 AM
could led be lead? 7/10. it's trying hard to be an 8 though..
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-02/12:18 AM
you my friend are a robot...recharge. please. and lose the stanza jog..you words aren't critically poignant enough to require it.
Re: Musings from the LTD by w~* ATHENA *~w	19-Sep-02/12:24 AM
end it with read the news a little to much lately without opening my eyes.? just riffing who knows.
Re: Bathroom Angel Crusade by royalflesh	19-Sep-02/12:27 AM
ral tight cunt muscles here...how about (stilling) instead..still real smart...8.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Sep-02/12:30 AM
Bet that's a potent musical piece..8/10