| Re: Hurt by Cougarchic |
1-May-04/10:29 AM |
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what do you mean by 'real'.
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| Re: Do You Rue Barbed Pi? by MacFrantic |
1-May-04/10:25 AM |
Interesting enough. The cliches are best when they fit together though.
Best bits - She's driving me over the edge/ stuck in the trunk'
and 'dawns on me/ sun is rising'
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| Re: There Is No Such Thing As A Poem by Aetius |
30-Apr-04/1:31 PM |
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'There are truths bled out through ink-stained hands;' I think you are probably thinking about philosophers, poetes just write pretty words.
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| Re: a comment on saltwater bath by J.B. Manning |
29-Apr-04/3:50 AM |
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| Re: Pardon my lines by Bobjim |
28-Apr-04/11:11 AM |
You are right. What I meant to say was that asking mona lisa for head under the pseudonym Dirk Diggler was ungentlemanly.
Don't do it again.
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| Re: a comment on Its the same old static & flaccid striptease. by SupremeDreamer |
28-Apr-04/7:56 AM |
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Probably DeQuincey who wrote confessions of an opium eater.
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| Re: a comment on Its the same old static & flaccid striptease. by SupremeDreamer |
27-Apr-04/11:14 PM |
To call women whores is quite misogynistic. Strippers are still women. Do you call men stripper whores.
Also this thing you have with drugs. How about more wit.
'the railman gave me two cures/ said step right in/ one was texas medicine/ the other railroad gin/ like a fool I mixed them/ it scrambled up my mind/ now people just seem uglier and/ I have no sense of time' Bob Dylan - Stuck inside of mobile.
One of my favourites.
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| Re: a comment on death by xunitedx |
27-Apr-04/1:40 PM |
DARK ANGEL IS A WHORE
so is his mother
I came back for more
From his mother
BRING IT ON DARK ANGEL
U.A Fanthorpe (under an assumed name).
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| Re: a comment on Love, Fair by MacFrantic |
27-Apr-04/12:21 PM |
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A nude personifying apprehension. On a plinth.
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| Re: Bare Feet, Bear Feet, a Bare Feat, and a Bear Feat by Enkidu |
27-Apr-04/10:56 AM |
Miss out has from the first line, it is just confusing.
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| Re: Its the same old static & flaccid striptease. by SupremeDreamer |
27-Apr-04/10:22 AM |
'oblivion becomes me' is terrible.
Some decent parts I think. The urge to write bit, the fades into subtelty, the spastic idiocy.
Don't like the misogynism, and you know the response talking about pot gets you.
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| Re: a comment on Herman by richa |
27-Apr-04/8:53 AM |
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The comment I make in my poems tends to be the flaws in the logic of the voices. i.e. why the hermit is outcast: 'he has no sweet tooth'.
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| Re: a comment on Love, Fair by MacFrantic |
27-Apr-04/7:53 AM |
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where is this image you speak of?
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| Re: Lose That Too ! by recherche |
27-Apr-04/7:52 AM |
There is a problem with the valley daffodils and marigolds.
It sounds as though you have just strung a few poeticisms together and hoped it makes sense.
Have you ever seen marigolds on a valley. Really?
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| Re: a comment on Love, Fair by MacFrantic |
27-Apr-04/6:49 AM |
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I believe it is important to learn what words and phrases mean before using them. Discuss.
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| Re: do androids dream? by nentwined |
22-Apr-04/6:48 AM |
Is didacticism still bad? What is poetry that is not didactic, impartial? Is poetry not creeping didacticism?
I'll give you an -8-, I would give you more if this was decentthoughtranker.com
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| Re: a comment on Quintus: Lesson 1 by richa |
22-Apr-04/6:37 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Ignorance by JohnnyRocker |
22-Apr-04/6:12 AM |
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wait a minute, to recite this you must likely have been part of the dialogue.
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| Re: a comment on Thaw by <~> |
22-Apr-04/1:44 AM |
I love it when you patronise me.
Of course I could not possibly have found this poeme utterly without voice and containing crystal lane swift esque abstractions.
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| Re: a comment on Thaw by <~> |
22-Apr-04/1:37 AM |
'think metaphors for nature. think parallel structures. think 'as above, so below'
Think capitalising after a full stop??!!
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