Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/11:26 AM
and which of love, hate and fear do you feel when you realise 2 - 2 = 1 - 1.
Re: a comment on Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/11:15 AM
No, you have offended my sensibilities by writing down some sums and then concluding that you can't write a maths poem. Thrown in the mix; love, hate, fear for no apparent reason, and then made some lewd comment about 'painting' with a greasy finger. The logic seems to be 1 + 1 is not poetic, 1 + 1 is maths, maths is not poetic.
Re: The years write us by kawakurdi	20-Dec-04/3:02 AM
That is the second time in a few days I have heard the word palimpsest and the second time ever. Quite good, I would say you could always beef up the more prosaic lines. I Like 'lacking melody' for super-old people.
Re: Pollution by Firestarter	20-Dec-04/3:00 AM
'What use is a thought that cannot be tasted?' come on surely you know the answer to that.
Re: Math Poem by Dovina	20-Dec-04/2:55 AM
No, you can not just write down a sum, burble on about love, hate, fear and then make some guff conclusion. Your poem about converse blah blah had potential if it didn't lose its focus and conclude all manner of things. The idea of a maths poem is ok. But this is far too lazy. The last verse is cool.
Re: Camping by jessicazee	20-Dec-04/2:40 AM
There seems no obvious reason for such short couplets here. The poem would benefit from having more solid chunks. Also 'already tell their tale' and other parts seem far too portentious. That is to say you are making the moth's death more significant than it is.
Re: a comment on Death by Liquid by PsydewaysTears	19-Dec-04/3:47 PM
Holy jesus, I more than hope it was more of a social suicide. Another day another poet watching another person kill themselves. As for political correctness, being nice to negros is the second biggest cause of suicide among white men in England. So yes you are correct.
Re: a comment on Limbs by Dovina	11-Dec-04/1:43 PM
and if I were to converse more plainly I would say you use two verbs in four (incomplete?) sentences which seems a bit stingy. 'The live oak limbs hang crooked' sounds so much more like a sentence than the stunted 'live oak limbs-(=) Crooked'.
Re: Dancing in Memories: Slipping Away In The House On The Hill by Stacy Stewart	11-Dec-04/3:47 AM
Needs quotation marks around the first two lines or the poem looks like some misguided tense experiment.
Re: a comment on Dancing in Memories: Slipping Away In The House On The Hill by Stacy Stewart	11-Dec-04/3:46 AM
in the comment: 'By: Anne Sexton'.
Re: Limbs by Dovina	11-Dec-04/3:40 AM
The language acquisition device in your brain seems to have horribly dysfunctioned. These are not sentences.
Re: a comment on The Rockets’ Song by Dovina	6-Dec-04/1:40 PM
the sin is not the tawdry favours but the being of common stock. the original sin was you see not being tempted in the garden of eden but the unmentionable temptation of matching ones curtains with ones carpet. to contemplate such a transgression makes my blood run cold.
Re: a comment on The Rockets’ Song by Dovina	6-Dec-04/12:47 PM
you can not have class coming from common stock. you must first gain wealth performing the tawdriest of favours and only with that wealth can your descendants begin to live down your sin like we all had to of adam's.
Re: a comment on The Rockets’ Song by Dovina	6-Dec-04/11:01 AM
you must forgive Dark_Angel he does not appreciate what common stock you come from.
Re: a comment on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina	5-Dec-04/9:30 AM
your problem is that you inferred when I said the poem used premises and conclusions, the conclusion I was talking about was the 'a compendium of evolution' one. Such an inference was not valid from my original post.
Re: a comment on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina	5-Dec-04/9:28 AM
Dark_Angel said snow is green is true. Snow is green is unproven. Please re-read my post to better understand this. In my previous post I showed how argument (errantly) had been used to make the conclusion (we are in love). Jesus, why are you being so gay. I read a poem, believed its structure resembled that of an logical argument (premise, premise, conclusion) in parts and commented likewise.
Re: a comment on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina	28-Nov-04/6:40 AM
That the poem pursues knowledge by logical means rather that empirical means makes it philosophical. I accept that:- p: I said I love you p: you said you love me c: we are in love is flawed. However it is still an attempt at philosophical enquiry and is set out as such. The correct conclusion would be we say we are in love. Also you are especially thick for suggesting that the single line argument 'snow is green' tells us 'snow is green' to be false.
Re: a comment on Love Bruises by Jezabele-In-Hell	27-Nov-04/2:50 PM
because they are 'love bruises'.
Re: delete my account: ode to poem ranker by fuzzylogic	27-Nov-04/2:44 PM
Just out of interest what exactly will you be suing for.
Re: a comment on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina	27-Nov-04/2:39 PM
p: I love you p: you love me c: we are in love. Premises and conclusion. The first few lines of the poem seem almost written in notation form. Also it is a bit late to call me thick having had to remove one of your own postings because it said something like 'you are thick, logic is not part of philosophy'. Jesus, if poemranker were a rock group, you would be the drummer.