| Re: Blade by Blade |
6-Nov-02/10:57 PM |
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If blade is a knife object the poem works for me but if blade is a is a person then it is harder to swallow.
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| Re: My Friend? by Blade |
6-Nov-02/11:01 PM |
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| Re: Longing by deadstar |
7-Nov-02/8:26 AM |
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I see the rhyme scheme but I think it might be better said without rhyme and show greater feeling said without the constaints. I like the positive last stanza after the angst of the first two.
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7-Nov-02/8:31 AM |
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That really says it well. Great images. Might be helped by an Ezra Pound editing approach. Shorter can be better.
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| Re: AIDS in a Glass by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
7-Nov-02/8:40 AM |
Limericks usually make me laugh.
I did. But I felt very, very guilty afterwards. It has also made me wary of drinking from a glarse. I will be drinking from the toilet bowl with a straw from now on.
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7-Nov-02/11:18 PM |
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A beautiful poem about what we all do. We observe, digest and regurgitate art that shows us those wonderful moments of reality we sometimes miss..
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| Re: The heart of self destruction by Roisin |
9-Nov-02/12:16 AM |
Fine imagery. What you mean to say is understood without the (by you).
Been on both sides of this one. Painful but real.
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9-Nov-02/12:25 AM |
A kitty picture in words. Lovely.
Done in less than 1000. This time these few words are worth the entire picture.
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| Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
9-Nov-02/12:30 AM |
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11-Nov-02/10:21 AM |
Love the second verse.
I, too, have felt like the nada in the nada of heaven. Defintely struck an A=440 within me.
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| Re: Horse Burgers by flanners |
11-Nov-02/10:25 AM |
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Unclear to me if this is a description of your interaction with your muse (Mist & misery). Is this about your writing process?
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| Re: Monday by betty swallox |
11-Nov-02/10:27 AM |
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I think I work there, too.
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29-Nov-02/7:56 PM |
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Yummy! The makin's of hot dogs. Just add mustard and it's 4th of July picnic fare. Good.
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22-Dec-02/8:41 AM |
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Good but could use a more lovable protagonist.
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| Re: a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub |
14-Mar-03/8:30 AM |
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Good execution of the subject.
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18-Mar-03/9:03 AM |
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Kid's think they know what's best for everybody. Kid's have no common sense. Kid's can put themselves and everyone around them in danger. Damn! I guess politicians are kids. Great poem. It resonates on way too many levels (perhaps even the level on which it was written). Love it's redemption qualities.
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| Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof |
20-Mar-03/7:09 PM |
Thoughtfully sculpted. This may not be much of a compliment, but I believe it's better than any of mine.
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22-Jul-03/12:20 PM |
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Just when I think I can't stand to read another Haiku, something like this pops up. Great image.
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22-Jul-03/12:20 PM |
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Just when I think I can't stand to read another Haiku, something like this pops up. Great image.
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| Re: Ode to a Pizza Hut Roach by http://mulberryfairy |
27-Jul-03/11:49 AM |
The Orkin man's Dna will long be gone before "Mamaroach" finishes her crouton.
Don't he know what spraying poisen can do
To him, to us, to me and you?
Silly contract killers.
Dan garcia-Black "Son of Roachmama"
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