on would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil
21 May 2002, 8:59 AM
how cool the interaction between surface and slippery slid-down
on Sansho-shima by spoink
19 May 2002, 6:45 AM
what's the title mean???
you seem better off without her. Get out more
you seem better off without her. Get out more
on some deleted poem
22 May 2002, 4:06 AM
oh yeeess.
David Lynch in binary
David Lynch in binary
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2002, 2:57 PM
I like this part best:
It is here in the lonely meadows of nowhere
that fierce winter winds thrust off Lake Erie
and push deep into her blood.
It is here I listen to the distant
howl of a father calling his girl home
this is doing for me the work of a poem, of this poem. A wordsmith you are; this piece is noticeable as emanate from someone who has developed certain skills of sound, angle and recursion;
but I would prefer if the "statement" delivered by all this image amenagement, this riffling of consciousness in recollection, were something else than a whine of victimhood.....
It is here in the lonely meadows of nowhere
that fierce winter winds thrust off Lake Erie
and push deep into her blood.
It is here I listen to the distant
howl of a father calling his girl home
this is doing for me the work of a poem, of this poem. A wordsmith you are; this piece is noticeable as emanate from someone who has developed certain skills of sound, angle and recursion;
but I would prefer if the "statement" delivered by all this image amenagement, this riffling of consciousness in recollection, were something else than a whine of victimhood.....
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2002, 3:04 PM
thanks ..
rich like the aleph ...
rich like the aleph ...
on All teeth when not. by ifni
21 May 2002, 9:27 AM
i like this
on The Church in Nagasaki by Staika
28 May 2002, 2:36 PM
I like this so much that I logged on despite being otherwise occupied mostly right now, to say how much I like it. It has a voice all right. Reminds me of .. oddly, of cummings in his this kind of mode; and I really like and admire cuimmings' poetry
on some deleted poem
21 May 2002, 3:48 PM
who are you trying to kid??
obscure meaningless crap is obscure meaningless crap, not poetry. It can be prose, verse, painting or ad copy. Poetry is the only way to say what it says. It require discipline both to write and to read. I don't know if your pseudodefinition is in the evasive ironic mode or if it really is, you believe, a definition. ??
obscure meaningless crap is obscure meaningless crap, not poetry. It can be prose, verse, painting or ad copy. Poetry is the only way to say what it says. It require discipline both to write and to read. I don't know if your pseudodefinition is in the evasive ironic mode or if it really is, you believe, a definition. ??
on some deleted poem
21 May 2002, 3:58 PM
intriguing; a little disjointed in a way that for me works against rather than with the emotional movement of the poem. I'd prefer not the second verse; unsubtle; it could be tighter altogether, but I like the variation of distance and texture
on i'm bad at waiting by silvertongueddevil
21 May 2002, 4:00 PM
Brilliant!
I LOVE it!!
sopoignantfunnylisteningcute
I LOVE it!!
sopoignantfunnylisteningcute
on Wicked Danny, A Lesson For You All by ruella
21 May 2002, 11:06 AM
this is funny and Struwwelpeter brought uptodateish and takethepissish with considerable success - i'd dump the "ye" tho, sounds dangerously as if it might be taking itself too seriously, out of place.....; shaggy dog metre.
on Do Not Pay Taxes To Feed Those Layabout Scum by ruella
21 May 2002, 11:11 AM
do you do picturse too? It really suggests an illustrator.. I see the darkling leers ...
on Do Not Pay Taxes To Feed Those Layabout Scum by ruella
21 May 2002, 11:12 AM
do you do pictures too? It really suggests an illustrator.. I see the darkling leers ...
on some deleted poem
21 May 2002, 11:27 AM
responding to:
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anonymous on the societal/cultural value of horror ..
v. Aristotle's "purging of pity and terror" .. has to reflect the ACTUAL society; opera and classical tragedy yes, but not 100% "of the moment" now.
Speaking from a societal/cultural viewpoint, what purposes do horror stories serve?
In your answer make references to the "Texas Chainsaw Massacre", "The Shining", and Michael Jackson's "Thriller".
on geometry by skaskowski
21 May 2002, 11:32 AM
self-pity puts me off and never seems like poetry to me; almost its impossible. poetry a true voice, I hear self-deception here.. and real poetic ability, squandered,
on as the hostage by silvertongueddevil
21 May 2002, 11:33 AM
fanTASTic
gotcha!
gotcha!
on some deleted poem
21 May 2002, 11:42 AM
wonderful up until "As fathers do" .. from then it seems to get clumsy, diffuse, far less assured. banging on when you were so graceful ..and the gold is wasted
on some deleted poem
19 May 2002, 6:44 AM
awkwardly written, not digested beforehand. Dishonest, you're making a loud noise .. but i don't get any real observation, just dramatised emotionality