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19-May-02/6:44 AM |
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awkwardly written, not digested beforehand. Dishonest, you're making a loud noise .. but i don't get any real observation, just dramatised emotionality
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| Re: Sansho-shima by spoink |
19-May-02/6:45 AM |
what's the title mean???
you seem better off without her. Get out more
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| Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil |
21-May-02/8:59 AM |
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how cool the interaction between surface and slippery slid-down
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| Re: #15 by mikejedw |
21-May-02/9:26 AM |
hmm
this one doesn't do it for me.
I guess i don't feel that way about the telephone pole, maybe an adventurer; so the knot at the end slips ...
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| Re: All teeth when not. by ifni |
21-May-02/9:27 AM |
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| Re: Wicked Danny, A Lesson For You All by ruella |
21-May-02/11:06 AM |
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this is funny and Struwwelpeter brought uptodateish and takethepissish with considerable success - i'd dump the "ye" tho, sounds dangerously as if it might be taking itself too seriously, out of place.....; shaggy dog metre.
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| Re: Do Not Pay Taxes To Feed Those Layabout Scum by ruella |
21-May-02/11:11 AM |
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do you do picturse too? It really suggests an illustrator.. I see the darkling leers ...
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| Re: Do Not Pay Taxes To Feed Those Layabout Scum by ruella |
21-May-02/11:12 AM |
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do you do pictures too? It really suggests an illustrator.. I see the darkling leers ...
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21-May-02/11:27 AM |
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anonymous on the societal/cultural value of horror ..
v. Aristotle's "purging of pity and terror" .. has to reflect the ACTUAL society; opera and classical tragedy yes, but not 100% "of the moment" now.
Speaking from a societal/cultural viewpoint, what purposes do horror stories serve?
In your answer make references to the "Texas Chainsaw Massacre", "The Shining", and Michael Jackson's "Thriller".
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| Re: geometry by skaskowski |
21-May-02/11:32 AM |
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self-pity puts me off and never seems like poetry to me; almost its impossible. poetry a true voice, I hear self-deception here.. and real poetic ability, squandered,
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| Re: as the hostage by silvertongueddevil |
21-May-02/11:33 AM |
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21-May-02/11:42 AM |
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wonderful up until "As fathers do" .. from then it seems to get clumsy, diffuse, far less assured. banging on when you were so graceful ..and the gold is wasted
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21-May-02/3:48 PM |
who are you trying to kid??
obscure meaningless crap is obscure meaningless crap, not poetry. It can be prose, verse, painting or ad copy. Poetry is the only way to say what it says. It require discipline both to write and to read. I don't know if your pseudodefinition is in the evasive ironic mode or if it really is, you believe, a definition. ??
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21-May-02/3:58 PM |
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intriguing; a little disjointed in a way that for me works against rather than with the emotional movement of the poem. I'd prefer not the second verse; unsubtle; it could be tighter altogether, but I like the variation of distance and texture
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| Re: i'm bad at waiting by silvertongueddevil |
21-May-02/4:00 PM |
Brilliant!
I LOVE it!!
sopoignantfunnylisteningcute
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22-May-02/4:06 AM |
oh yeeess.
David Lynch in binary
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| Re: The Church in Nagasaki by Staika |
28-May-02/2:36 PM |
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I like this so much that I logged on despite being otherwise occupied mostly right now, to say how much I like it. It has a voice all right. Reminds me of .. oddly, of cummings in his this kind of mode; and I really like and admire cuimmings' poetry
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13-Sep-02/2:57 PM |
I like this part best:
It is here in the lonely meadows of nowhere
that fierce winter winds thrust off Lake Erie
and push deep into her blood.
It is here I listen to the distant
howl of a father calling his girl home
this is doing for me the work of a poem, of this poem. A wordsmith you are; this piece is noticeable as emanate from someone who has developed certain skills of sound, angle and recursion;
but I would prefer if the "statement" delivered by all this image amenagement, this riffling of consciousness in recollection, were something else than a whine of victimhood.....
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13-Sep-02/3:04 PM |
thanks ..
rich like the aleph ...
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