regarding some deleted poem...	14-Oct-02/9:33 AM
Let the rats run their race and enjoy your view from the top!
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	14-Oct-02/4:44 PM
I have to agree, enjoyably gross! Absolute artsy fartsy shit! Hard to think I could learn from this,but.....
Re: Warmth Amidst Winter by loneshadow29	14-Oct-02/5:36 PM
I like the transition from sadness to happiness.Um, your still telling,not showing. Instead of using a season directly(winter), try being more specific. I.E. Compare your feeling of sorrow to a frozen lake. Compare your happiness to the smoldering coals of a fire not yet fully extinguished. You want your feeling to be worse (or better) than anyone elses, so exaggerate the feeling, this helps grab your audience. Did you knock a knuckle on the counter? Then make it sound as if you slammed your hand in a friggin CAR DOOR! See the diff? Keep going, you're gaining on it.6 I'm gonna make you work for it.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Oct-02/5:44 PM
Dark Angel, would you please piss all over my current haiku, god knows I need the help, thanks.8 For your twisted waffle.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Oct-02/11:46 AM
Trying to stay piqued is hard. 9
Re: Bowed by <~>	15-Oct-02/11:51 AM
Maybe some day I'll be able to graciously flow the pain of romance the way you two ladies do. Until then, I will be happy watching the pros.9
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Oct-02/11:55 AM
Not to answer for Gods wife but, because some guys get pleasure from doing that very thing, sickos that they are. (you knew that didn't you)? Gods wife, How do you extract so much pain from so few words? It's amazing!9
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Oct-02/3:24 PM
Definitely well detailed. I was worried about seeming namby-pamby by posting nature poems. You give me hope.9 For your birdie wake-up call.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Oct-02/3:32 PM
OK now I'm reeally confused! It is? It isn't. Why not? Is this legal? Can I try one? Can you help me with my Haiku? Why did the chicken cross the road? Um, I think it's a cool idea though.8
Re: ending by Limness	16-Oct-02/3:50 PM
Screw the damn fortune, gimme the cookie! 9 for your gentle opening of the baked flower.
Re: ~*Broken Soul*~ by Katie	16-Oct-02/4:01 PM
Yup, works best when you do it that way.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Oct-02/6:38 PM
Go to your room young lady! 8
Re: The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness	16-Oct-02/6:44 PM
I dunno, this speaks to me of a prostitutes sadness towards her predicament...? Well written, I think.
Re: How I Got Laid by liljsmith87	16-Oct-02/6:47 PM
No, ya got it wrong. This IS a place where you kiss and tell.
Re: Reptiles & Dust - Twenty-two through Forty-two by Wulf	16-Oct-02/6:51 PM
Some thing works here. But it is a very large circle you're drawing with it.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Oct-02/7:47 PM
We should all listen to this piece. I think.
Re: Anti-Kinetic by anonymous	16-Oct-02/8:07 PM
Maybe I'm just warmin' up.
Re: Anti-Kinetic by anonymous	17-Oct-02/5:37 AM
Ok, I can't see any problems with this as is. I think you may be poetandknowit toying with me though. Either way I like this piece.9 if you're interested in the scoring
Re: On the Swings by Christof	17-Oct-02/5:41 AM
Swing away! If I shut up long enough, would you mentor me?
Re: Librarian by Tibbs	18-Oct-02/4:05 PM
Um, she must be aware of your presence if you can tell the color of her eyes.Also,1 down? One down her blouse maybe. Overall, very good. Not that I'm a pro or anything. 8 For your lady in uniform.