Re: Daytime TV by jessicazee	3-Jul-05/11:24 AM
I think it's a great grouping.
Re: pop by Dental Panic	5-Jul-05/8:15 AM
Three types of pop? Pop as in pop culture, as in father, and as a measure of a moment quickly passed? I stll am not getting much O'Hara. Maybe it's me.
Re: The And women by INTRANSIT	5-Jul-05/8:23 AM
Typo corrected. Stanzas 4,5,7 have been altered.
Re: Born and Fed by Dovina	5-Jul-05/8:32 AM
D? No offense dear, I think you're trying too hard on this one, and the last. Set aside the cow thing for a while and go read G/Ws stuff. Here's the in door: Cyclical ketchup monstrosity. P.S. I see cows a lot in my travels but aint put pen to paper yet. glad you did.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Jul-05/7:20 AM
all the way bad. good.
Re: Lover by Dental Panic	12-Jul-05/6:34 AM
I found that O'Hara poem you recomended. I think I have problems reading some poets because they use so many references and allusions that unless one has spent their entire life reading, there's no possible way to catch up! Very frustrating this is, MMHMM? This particular poem WAS more acessible to me. I still don't know who the lady is. Would it behoove me to chase down all of the allusions? I'm taking a hiatus from writing as I have no direction, no plan to take my poetry anywhere specific. I believe without that, my efforts are useless. This is also why I've taken to not leaving comments. Take care, E-mail me if you wish.
Re: Worth by Dovina	25-Jul-05/4:33 PM
And it's look, rude, unbending, lusty, made me think of myself,.... but not quite.
Re: Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp	25-Jul-05/9:05 PM
alllright ALRIGHT!
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jul-05/6:25 AM
aside from the -an, I'd say perfect.
Re: Jennifer won the war. by darby pyn	26-Jul-05/6:29 AM
Monster.
Re: Hindsight by darby pyn	26-Jul-05/6:34 AM
" I was their chocolate." Ace. I'm guessing most (95%) of all children are unplanned and then resented by their parents. There's potential here but it's gonna take work.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jul-05/6:38 AM
I'm assuming lyra is your cat.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jul-05/6:50 AM
it seems romantic then goes all sexual but -rim shot- is a ?drum hit? here. i think.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jul-05/6:54 AM
Maybe too much time on the jeans. Just a little trim. No pun intended.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jul-05/6:57 AM
This suggests to me you are talking about a poetess at a reading you saw.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Jul-05/6:08 AM
funny thing. your homepage says nothing about helping those in need. not your job eh?
Re: How Angels Sleep by Dovina	17-Aug-05/3:15 PM
please drop the full stop at the end of s-2. some stanzas have a submissive beat others don't. why? I got interchangeability between man/god/angels. For some reason that works for me.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Aug-05/3:23 PM
great title! I think nuclear when you say -melt. I smell something to do with Muslim extremists .
Re: Written while Kayaking by Sasha	17-Aug-05/3:31 PM
I suggest, kill s-3 and s-4, save the penultimate and attach it to the bottom of s-2. Leave the end.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Aug-05/3:47 PM
I don't know what to say about this other than it looks like more raw material than anything else. However, it is good stock, like Hickory. I would like to see the rewrite.