on Daytime TV by jessicazee
3 Jul 2005, 11:24 AM
I think it's a great grouping.
on pop by Dental Panic
5 Jul 2005, 8:15 AM
Three types of pop? Pop as in pop culture, as in father, and as a measure of a moment quickly passed? I stll am not getting much O'Hara. Maybe it's me.
on The And women by INTRANSIT
5 Jul 2005, 8:23 AM
Typo corrected. Stanzas 4,5,7 have been altered.
on Born and Fed by Dovina
5 Jul 2005, 8:32 AM
D? No offense dear, I think you're trying too hard on this one, and the last. Set aside the cow thing for a while and go read G/Ws stuff. Here's the in door: Cyclical ketchup monstrosity.
P.S. I see cows a lot in my travels but aint put pen to paper yet. glad you did.
P.S. I see cows a lot in my travels but aint put pen to paper yet. glad you did.
on some deleted poem
6 Jul 2005, 7:20 AM
all the way bad. good.
on Lover by Dental Panic
12 Jul 2005, 6:34 AM
I found that O'Hara poem you recomended. I think I have problems reading some poets because they use so many references and allusions that unless one has spent their entire life reading, there's no possible way to catch up! Very frustrating this is, MMHMM? This particular poem WAS more acessible to me. I still don't know who the lady is. Would it behoove me to chase down all of the allusions? I'm taking a hiatus from writing as I have no direction, no plan to take my poetry anywhere specific. I believe without that, my efforts are useless. This is also why I've taken to not leaving comments. Take care, E-mail me if you wish.
on some deleted poem
26 Jul 2005, 6:25 AM
aside from the -an, I'd say perfect.
on Jennifer won the war. by darby pyn
26 Jul 2005, 6:29 AM
Monster.
on Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp
25 Jul 2005, 9:05 PM
alllright ALRIGHT!
on some deleted poem
26 Jul 2005, 6:38 AM
I'm assuming lyra is your cat.
on some deleted poem
26 Jul 2005, 6:50 AM
it seems romantic then goes all sexual but -rim shot- is a ?drum hit? here. i think.
on some deleted poem
26 Jul 2005, 6:54 AM
Maybe too much time on the jeans. Just a little trim. No pun intended.
on some deleted poem
26 Jul 2005, 6:57 AM
This suggests to me you are talking about a poetess at a reading you saw.
on some deleted poem
27 Jul 2005, 6:08 AM
funny thing. your homepage says nothing about helping those in need. not your job eh?
on How Angels Sleep by Dovina
17 Aug 2005, 3:15 PM
please drop the full stop at the end of s-2. some stanzas have a submissive beat others don't. why?
I got interchangeability between man/god/angels.
For some reason that works for me.
I got interchangeability between man/god/angels.
For some reason that works for me.
on some deleted poem
17 Aug 2005, 3:23 PM
great title! I think nuclear when you say -melt. I smell something to do with Muslim extremists .
on Written while Kayaking by Sasha
17 Aug 2005, 3:31 PM
I suggest, kill s-3 and s-4, save the penultimate and attach it to the bottom of s-2. Leave the end.
on some deleted poem
17 Aug 2005, 3:47 PM
I don't know what to say about this other than it looks like more raw material than anything else. However, it is good stock, like Hickory. I would like to see the rewrite.