Re: Desired Height by Wulf	17-Mar-03/6:51 AM
I like the way you add ethnicity and authenticity to your words by abbreviating them!!!! 10!!!!!!!!!
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Mar-03/6:52 AM
THIS IS ACE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Re: Another Dull Moment by Blindproject217	17-Mar-03/6:54 AM
I would suggest the following changes: "Another Dull Moment" --> " " "Another boring moment" --> " " "I search these desolate streets for signs of life" --> " " "I am overcome with calamity and strife" --> " " "Plagued by this earthly mindset" --> " " "The world is plotting against me" --> " " "Day and night it plans my demise" --> " " "My eyes are dimming" --> " " "The light in this place has long since faded" --> " " "I choke on the dark" --> " " "As slowly I am suffocated" --> " " "I turn my eyes" --> " " "As I take my last breath" --> " " "I see your face" --> " " "And I am in wonder at your beauty" --> " " "So perfect so picturesque" --> " " "You take your hand in mine" --> " " "No longer do I look for a sign" --> " " "No longer do I search for a reason" --> " " "The vail is lifted" --> " " "I stand up and slowly look around" --> " " "The light comes" --> " " "And I slowly understand" --> " " "Why I?ve wasted all this time" --> " " "Why I?ve wasted all these years" --> " " "Why I?ve thrown away these moments" --> " " "Why I?ve used up all tears" --> " " " Time has come" --> " " "And time has gone" --> " " "But you stand here" --> " " "My longing heart has found no answers to speak of" --> " " "No longer must I search for reason" --> " " "I have found it in you" --> " "
Re: Heirlooms by Bachus	17-Mar-03/6:57 AM
I think what you've done here is confused "poetry" with "a series of uneventful anecdotes about childhood". A good try though! 10!!!
Re: Meditation 03 by Blue Magpie	17-Mar-03/7:00 AM
God's test is the GCSE Religious Studies examination. I got a C even though I didn't revise! Clever or what!?!?!
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Mar-03/8:17 AM
Great use of "face" to rhyme with "disgrace"!!!11
Re: A Face Of Sadness by mr_ice55	18-Mar-03/8:19 AM
Excellent use of the word "like". Sometimes a metaphor can be too strong, can't it?
Re: the salt shaker by elizabethann	18-Mar-03/8:29 AM
Great idea to have someone drinking someone's tears! And so original, too! Thanks for felching it onto poemeranker! 10/10!
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Mar-03/4:39 PM
THIS IS ALMOST AS GOOD AS 'less than a sentence'.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Mar-03/2:02 AM
This is a bullshit poem. "We did all that we could". What did you do? Sit at home and watch it on TV and say "omgomgomgomg" and call your friends and shake your fist at Osama? WELL THANK GOD FOR YOU, CAPTAIN JUSTICE. Let me guess: Everyone you have showed this to has said "This is a beautiful piece of poetry!!" NEWS-FLASHE: IT ISN'T. THEY SAID THAT BECAUSE THEY, LIKE YOU, ARE UNDER THE SILLY IMPRESSION THAT THE AIM AND SOLE PROJECT OF POETRY IS TO SAY BEAUTIFUL AND MEANINGFUL THINGS, PREFERABLY IN THE MOST VAGUE AND HACKNEYED WAY POSSIBLE.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Mar-03/2:15 AM
pranked
Re: Who am I? by thepinkbunnyofdoom	21-Mar-03/9:46 AM
Apparently you think the aim of poetry is to take an idea on which you have only the vaguest of grasps, write down the first things that come to your mind when you think about the idea, and then try to confuse the reader with obtuse, meaningless sentences that at first glance look like ones that actually have meanings, so their grasp is made even worse than yours. Well you're right! That is the aim of poetry.
Re: Gods Gift of Love by mckenzie	21-Mar-03/5:41 PM
Please tell me. Do you actually believe that 'ur' is the spelling of that word?
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Mar-03/5:19 AM
THEY LIVED IN THE FOREST. THEY HID IN THE TREES. THEY WERE NAKED. THEY WERE GAY. BUT HE WAS... THE HUNTER. www.mcviruss.nl/swf/escopeta.swf
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Mar-03/7:13 AM
Did you kiss the toe gently and delicately, or violently and roughly? The poeme leaves this ambiguous.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Apr-03/4:22 AM
This is a masterpiece of epoch-making proportions. Never before has the human condition been portrayed with such startling clarity, and with such a vast array of raw, uncompromising emotion(s). The beautiful language is poured onto the page so deftly that it hit me like some sort of divine discharge of sick that had been discharged straight into my face. To mistake this piece for the felched-out bum stain of a semi-literate pile of old socks would be a mistake from which the already swollen groin of American literature would never recover. 6/10.
Re: Cussedness by Nicholas Jones	3-Apr-03/4:28 AM
Piper's Negligence ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ There once was some shit in a diaper Belonging to Baroness Piper I consulted her mum 'bout the state of her bum And she said she'd forgotten to wipe her.
Re: Morman On A Bike by Blindproject217	3-Apr-03/5:39 AM
At the University of Cambridge, Cambridge, England, I have been accosted by mormons in black suits and ties on no fewer than six separate occasions. They also wore black trench coats and had immaculate side partings. I once asked one of them why they wore such clothes, because a number of my colleagues had voiced concerns that they looked rather like agents of the gestapo. Their response was that the Holy Spirit is clean so one should always try to maintain a state of cleanliness when doing the Lord's work. At which point, I pointed to the Mormon's shoe and offered him a moist tow'lette. He looked down and to his horror discovered that he had been standing in the bountiful remains of an upturned nappy throughout the entire conversation. Not really. That last bit was a lie. But that would have been pretty damn smooth, don't you think?
Re: How Strange by T. Becquerel	3-Apr-03/12:59 PM
Yes and don't you also find it strange that whilst we chant in pious tones of charity and goodwill to all men, our reaction to the common beggar in the street is always to tread on his bollocks and vomit on his face. There's so much hypocrisy in western society that I sometimes feel like trampling a beggar's bollocks and vomitting on his face. Then maybe things would change. But not until we do something about Palestine. I'm all for an independant Palestinian state IN PRINCIPLE, but is that really the correct spelling of Palestinian? Yes. It is.
Re: Morning Gory by Bobjim	8-Apr-03/7:38 AM
This is a quality piece of writing. I'm sure you'll etc etc.