poemranker ::Heirlooms by Bachus

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Free verse № 44429

Heirlooms

Member since 2002 · Posted 16 Mar 2003 · 7 comments

My grandmother had three clocks. Grandfather clocks, lovely antiques. I cleaned them each & every Sunday. I thought "what a waste of time." and other things too. My Grandfather had a big swimming pool. I would test the chemicals, and clean it. My friends, and I, would play many games in that pool. Until our eyes would sting and itch. I still drive by that house. My father was a drug dealer. He never came home at night. Back then my dreams were full of chase scenes. I was left cooking the macoroni. For my siblings and their questions. Our Mother was not eachothers'. A halter top wrung out upon the line. Lip stick and eye liner positioned. Another night out on the town. Somethings are better left un-said. In the distance is a gate and a well. up ahead sits a man counting out coins. he knows who I am, and much more too. Like my favourite songs, and middle name. Looming behind my approach, waits tomorrow.

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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 17-Mar-03/6:57 AM Reply
I think what you've done here is confused "poetry" with "a series of uneventful anecdotes about childhood". A good try though! 10!!!
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 17-Mar-03/10:29 AM Reply
Some stains come clean, some don't. I do. You don't. I'm going to England in May, wanna come? I'll push you and clean you and tuck you in, as Jesus would..
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › <{Baba^Yaga}> 17-Mar-03/10:01 PM Reply
Only if you bring god'swife with you and she promises to launch herself on top of Stephen Hawking and make love to him while his assistants frantically try to roll her gigantic mass off of him before his bones are all crushed.
[n/a] Bachus › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 18-Mar-03/12:05 AM Reply
That would be difficult... Meaning that she's extremely petite, and not one to leap often. tell me more about the assistants, and i'll tell you more about her. Explicite stuff, on the down low. shhh. I can say positively come out and say though, that she does not way an ounce over 120 lbs soaking wet.
[n/a] Bachus › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 18-Mar-03/12:12 AM Reply
Trying is for amuteurs sir, i write world class poetry as often as i break wind and pour ale to a head. last week i leaned on my right cheek in my stool to the right a bit, and this one flew out. we are all handicap in our own special ways. there is no rest for the wicked or my gift you ivory tickler you, i can't keep my hands, my lips, my mouth away from my sacred calling. the cry of a breaking warm breeze from within.
[n/a] <~> 17-Mar-03/12:05 PM Reply
dammit. i was looking for 'cocks' to rhyme with 'clocks.'
and you get all serious on me.
[5] daniella 21-Mar-03/8:14 PM Reply
maccaroni in a trailer park childhood memory-ringing like some wild alarm gone off in your head. prolific you are.