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Gods Gift of Love (Free verse) by mckenzie Welcome little one, welcome into our lives our world our family. We can
not wait to see you to hold you to smell ur sweet scent. We thank god
everyday for the precious gift we are about to receive from above.
Your father and I love each other so much we made you and we will love
you twice as much .
We cant wait until we look into those deep blue eyes.
See those rosey red cheeks,and those huge dimples, smileing back at us
with all the love in the world.
Those courious little eyes wondering what journeys lay behind the door
or out in the huge world.
Those eyes for us to show.
Things like what grows what makes noise,to make you laugh to make you
grow.
Grow big and strong knowing that you are loved and wanted so much in
this life. Mommy and Daddy and Big Sissy can not wait for your arrive
our precious gift from God.
Up the ladder:
untitled
Down the ladder:
sorry, but i am lame
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Posted: March 20, 2003 8:33 PM PST; Last modified: March 21, 2003 2:42 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.029801 Overall Rank: 7261 Comments:
Please tell me. Do you actually believe that 'ur' is the spelling of that word?
Still a few grammatical errors but nowhere near as many as I usually make. Don't let D.A. get under ur skin, He thinks he knows everything. -9- and half If I could give one.
Sadly I must side with D.A., while I might not be the best speller or an excellent grammar student, I know how important grammar and spelling can be to just about everything you will try to accomplish in life.
*If you can't spell people will never take you seriously, trust me it happens to me all the time. *Not understanding basic grammar will effect how you write and speak. *Do you ever finish reading a poem that has tons of grammatical errors? I don't, Because it shows that what they posted was something not very well thought out. They did not take the time to correct it, or improve on it, all they have is a foundation of an idea. I guarantee you that if they went over this poem a couple times it would be significantly better. While I do like this poem, like all I see room for improvement. 7
What I was trying to get across is that spelling isn't everything!
Sure its nice but If you can spell excellently but can't convey an image then your poem is going to suck. On the other hand if you can paint that image with your words for the reader to see but can't spell worth a damn your not losing out as much. Yes I am still talking about this poem, The image she lays out is one that is easy to imagine. Plus you can see her feelings of joy and hope for the future. Typos or not its a lovely piece.
Oh! You were trying to get that across, huh? Yeah? Great! Were you? Really? Oh yeah? Tough guy, huh! Oh, yeah, sure. Come on man. Then how come you said "people don't take off for typos as much as you'd think"? Is that the same as "spelling isn't everything"? No! It isn't! I don't think you'll find it is! I've checked! It's not the same!!!!11111
Let's look at a point-by-point rundown of exactly why "spelling isn't everything" isn't the same as "people don't take off for typos as much as you'd think". 1. It could be that spelling wasn't everything, but that people still took off for typos all the time, if, for the sake of example, everyone took a drug that made them take off for everything. 2. It could be that spelling *was* everything, but that people didn't take off for typos, if, for example, people suddenly all took drugs that made them mild-mannered. 3. "Spelling isn't everything" is a statement about values. Its truth depends on moral facts. "People don't take off for typos as much as you'd think" is a statement about people. Its truth depends on facts that don't need to be (and probably aren't) moral.
4. The reference of "you" in "as much as you'd think" isn't fixed, if it means "the average person who has no special knowledge about how often people take off for typos". The amount the average person would think will vary over time. The degree to which spelling is everything will also vary over time, since the moral importance of spelling will change (e.g. if aliens who punish bad spelling take over the world and we have to protect our families with the power to spell properly), but clearly not coincidentally with the average person's opinion of spelling (people might come to think spelling is everything because it saves their lives, or they might come to think spelling is worthless and detestable, because they hate the spelling-loving aliens so much).
Then does "you" mean something else? There don't seem any plausible alternatives. If you meant "as much as I, thepinkbunnyofdoom, would think", then there would be no point in mentioning it, because, since I know nothing about how often you think people take off for typos, you can't convince me that it's an overestimate. If you meant "you, -=Dark_Angel=-", that would be absurd. Let's call however much *I* would think 'X'. Now obviously I believe in the proposition "'People take off X amount", and nothing could possibly change that, since even if you convinced me that people take off hardly at all, then the value of X - what I believe the amount is - would change to be "hardly at all", and it would still be true to say "People take off X amount", i.e. "People take off hardly at all". But, even though I necessarily believe in "People take off X amount", what you're trying to convince me of is "People *don't* take off X amount", which is the negation of what I necessarily believe. So the only way you could possibly convince me is if I did an impossible thing (disbelieve what I necessarily believe). Therefore for you to convince me is only possible if it's impossible, which is to say it's impossible, and therefore possible, and therefore impossible. In other words, impossible. In other words, possible. In other words... IMPOSSIBLE. QED motherfucker. In other words, check motherfucking mate. In other words, better motherfucking luck next time, motherfucker. 5. "Not as much as you'd think" doesn't even have any of the same words in them as "People take off for typos everywhere". It's obvious who the person who is right is and who the one who is the one who is wrong is is. You! And me! In that god damn order! WHICH MEANS YOU'RE WRONG. TALK ABOUT GUTTED TO THE MOTHERFUCKING MAX DUDE RADICAL WIIIIIIIPEOUTTT DUDUDUDUDUDUDUDUDUDUDUDUDUDU Your dad, -=Dark_Angel=-
Now to address your points about this being an decent poem. It is not. It is a terrible work through and through, with nothing original, well-put, imaginative, evocative, clever, pleasant-sounding or even rhyming in it. And that's just for its merit as a bearable string of ideas, let alone its conformity to the definition of 'poem'. The lexicographical incompetence of the author is merely the icing on the cake.
P.S. Although "lexicographical" means "pertaining to writing or compiling a dictionary", not "pertaining to spelling and grammar", I used it because the dangerously self-referential thought process necessarily undergone to formulate the definition is so dangerous that we have to use it every time we can so the definition is not lost.
P.S. For extra credit, rearrange the words in the following string to mean `possibly`:
`necessarily not not`
D.A. For you the world is flat and only the complexities of your own ignorance coupled with what you(meaning you D.A. and you alone) believe to be the truths of reality. I know this poem hits on cliche but the fact that it moves me despite its typos is why I like it. Relax. Stop being anal and examining everything with a microscope.
P.S. If I was in checkmate in a game of words I'd have to admit defeat or a third party would have to decare me defeated. Seeing as that hasn't happened(cause much as it may be hard for you to belive) I haven't been defeated.
"People don't take off for typos as much as you'd think" when equated with mathmatics versus "spelling isn't everything". Thats like equating Mcdonalds with Burgar King. They are almost one another's shadow. Same thing just a slightly different favor.
You swallow everything I give you with an eager look and a proud telling-off when you've digested it.
Melodramatic? Why not. But your last comment makes about as much sense to me as fishing with a hand grenade.
P.S. You already know my age D.A. its yours no one is quite sure about.
as an impartial 3rd party, i declare you are defeated.
pack your things and go; you may show yourself out. p.s.--don't forget the bulbous root vegetables you soiled along the way!!!!
Rich. Just rich. Unfortunately You have no authority to inforce your declaration! So sadly no I won't consent defeat(not to mention that you are not an impartial party, seeing as to how you have made comments to me at least, And thus have some background history with one of the debators, and can express a bias either for myself or D.A. <it also doesn't help that I think that you and D.A. are the same person>).
P.S. I wouldn't say soiled. More like dug up and put to proper use, then returned to nature.
1. i have never been kind to -=Dark_Angel=-
2. i have never been kind to you 3. therefore, you are equals on the ranker 4. you stated,"P.S. If I was in checkmate in a game of words I'd have to admit defeat or a third party would have to decare me defeated. Seeing as that hasn't happened(cause much as it may be hard for you to belive) I haven't been defeated." 5. i am not -=Dark_Angel=-; i haven't the genitalia for it, nor the propensity for bums he has. 6. i am not you 7. therefore, i am a third party, and by your own admission in #4, above, that makes you defeated if i declare it. 8. suck it!!!!!! 9. hahahahahaha!!!!!!! 10. no, wait: HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!1
I never said that D.A. had a genitalia.
A third party implys someone who can't express a bias. It therefore excludes YOU! Seeing as to how you have never been kind to either of us that makes you bias against the both of us. Two negative bias are still a bias in one direction. You declared me defeated but you already have preconcieved notions about the both of us, so NO. P.S. What would you have me suck? I know that I would probably refuse on some sort of moral grounds but I must say that I do wonder. P.S.S. What happened to me me arguing with D.A.?
I'll tell you what happened. It reached the stage where I had won the argument, as could be judged by any logically-minded person, and yet you appeared to continue talking absolute bollocks (cf. 'that makes you bias against the both of us. Two negative bias are still a bias in one direction.'), so I stopped bothering.
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My work here is DONE
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P.S. You might want to fix your typos before anyone else rates this (trust me people do take off for that here).
But just so you do know, here is how much it happens: A lot. Here are some things that happen if you can't spell or punctuate:
* You lose marks on tests and exams.
* You can't get a job that requires literary skills (such as "poet").
* People think you are a moron or a teenager or both.
* You will get into arguments on the internet.
* You will become a defensive retard who keeps telling himself that spelling and punctuation aren't important at all, and it's what's inside that counts.
P.S. Although I don't think I know everything, I do think I know 91% of things, which is more than you know. The 9% of things I do not know is in the field of emergency bum surgery.
* Only if its a spelling test(which by the count for about as much as one nights homework). Exams most People are so nervous that if they took off for every typo then most students wouldn't get beyond high school.(In America anyway.)
* Well Oh Holy Shit where is Shakespearse's Application? How about Robert Burns <Oh wait by your accounts He is not Qualified>. What about (oh my god an American Writer) Mark Twain. He couldn't spell worth a shit and yet how many novels did he sell.
* Yeah I agree but sometimes the case is far, far, worse.
* Hmmm... D.A. You've been in quite a few arguments and I'm sure there are those people who don't make typos that get in arguments as well. There is no gaurantee what anyone will do on the internet.
* Bait taken on that one. Yeah I guess I am a defensive retard but then again Wait... I've always been a defensive retard. I don't care about my insides (other than my lungs and liver <I want to keep those>).
P.S. Knowledge without use is trival and wasted.