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Gods Gift of Love (Free verse) by mckenzie

Welcome little one, welcome into our lives our world our family. We can not wait to see you to hold you to smell ur sweet scent. We thank god everyday for the precious gift we are about to receive from above. Your father and I love each other so much we made you and we will love you twice as much . We cant wait until we look into those deep blue eyes. See those rosey red cheeks,and those huge dimples, smileing back at us with all the love in the world. Those courious little eyes wondering what journeys lay behind the door or out in the huge world. Those eyes for us to show. Things like what grows what makes noise,to make you laugh to make you grow. Grow big and strong knowing that you are loved and wanted so much in this life. Mommy and Daddy and Big Sissy can not wait for your arrive our precious gift from God.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 23-Mar-03/8:05 AM
Now to address your points about this being an decent poem. It is not. It is a terrible work through and through, with nothing original, well-put, imaginative, evocative, clever, pleasant-sounding or even rhyming in it. And that's just for its merit as a bearable string of ideas, let alone its conformity to the definition of 'poem'. The lexicographical incompetence of the author is merely the icing on the cake.

P.S. Although "lexicographical" means "pertaining to writing or compiling a dictionary", not "pertaining to spelling and grammar", I used it because the dangerously self-referential thought process necessarily undergone to formulate the definition is so dangerous that we have to use it every time we can so the definition is not lost.




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