| Re: Snake Oil: A Deadication by OneFingerAnswer |
31-Jul-03/7:51 AM |
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Probably the most appallingly executed limerick since horus8's epoch-making masterpiece, "AIDS in a crayon". 10 out of 10 for effort, though!
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| Re: The Call Of Cannons by SupremeDreamer |
31-Jul-03/7:55 AM |
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Great use of "dope" to rhyme with "hope".
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
31-Jul-03/7:59 AM |
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I think black people are quite good. What do you think?
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31-Jul-03/8:40 AM |
mammarys of Paris (Free verse) by richa
mammary;
the succulent lactate gland
-------------------------------------with full bounty,
-------------------------------------sucked dry
to just
the mere husk
of a once priceless udder.
-------------------------------------Feeding me
milk,
like a giant booby
-------------------------------------by the nipple
floating high in the sky
(balloon
-------------------------------------of my wild thoughts)
popped by the Eiffel Tower, the lover-tit parks
(on someone's face)
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| Re: black by sk8rs_rule_all |
31-Jul-03/4:49 PM |
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what a bum crushingly pointless block of text
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| Re: A Circle Starts with C by rusty |
31-Jul-03/4:52 PM |
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What the fuck does "percision" mean? This poeme made me feel malcontent.
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| Re: something by sk8rs_rule_all |
31-Jul-03/4:54 PM |
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wow you must have been in a bonkers mood when u wrote this ur so wacky and zany i can't keep up with u jeepers your cr4zy!!!!10
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1-Aug-03/6:36 AM |
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A really excellent poeme.
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| Re: American Eden by Don-Quixote |
4-Aug-03/6:34 AM |
Line 2: its => it's
Line 3: societies => society's
Line 6: its => it's
Line 11: its => it's
Line 14: its => it's
Line 17: its => it's
Line 19: self pity => self-pity
Line 21: its => it's
Line 25: its => it's
Line 30: its => it's
Line 34: its => it's
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| Re: The Smell of Wolves by rusty |
5-Aug-03/3:25 PM |
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No shit dude. I was raised by prawnes actually. Did you know the one thing a prawne fears most is an EXOSKELLINGTON?
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| Re: Angel by abecedarian |
7-Aug-03/5:31 AM |
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As a committed Christian, I found this piece to be rather lewd and distasteful.
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| Re: Angel by mistaric |
7-Aug-03/7:59 AM |
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7-Aug-03/4:34 PM |
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| Re: Musings: Willow Sculpture by SupremeDreamer |
10-Aug-03/10:15 AM |
Do you know what this poeme sounds like to me? It sounds like you thought about "weeping willows", and whenever you couldn't think of a word, or you could think of a word but wanted a better word meaning something similar, you looked in a dictionary or thesaurus to try and find the most sophisticated word you could, and then used that instead. The result is the slantiest pile of pretentious "you cause me to ruminate" verse I have ever seen. What a mess. Like Dante meets bosh in a crack lounge. I would urge anyone reading the words: ruminate, lachrymose, enshrouding, legion, decrepit or opprobrium, to picture the 17 year old SupremeDreamer earnestly leafing through the dictionary in search of said word, with an uncompromisingly learned expression on his bloated face. As far as I can see, if you are barely literate then your only chance to hit the big leagues as writer is to become a ballsy Y2K slam-street poete. Personally, I prefer a fusion of flash-dance with MC Hammer shit.
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| Re: play to win by peaceseeker |
12-Aug-03/3:21 PM |
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A good effort but it doesn't rhyme very well. Keep working at it, though! You'll get there!
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18-Aug-03/6:10 PM |
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19-Aug-03/5:13 PM |
yes quite. My motto has always been that we're all Christians - only SOME of us choose not to be...
I just pray that those without Christ can find as much meaning in their lives as I have in mine. Because without Jesus life becomes meaningless. Our wealths, our values, our lusts, our desires, our hopes, our fears, our dreams, our realities, our fictions, our actions and our reactions serve no purpose...
even our mottoes become meaningless.
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25-Aug-03/3:50 PM |
mortification at daybreak (Free verse) by -=Dark_Angel=-
here; with the wind in my massive face,
knee-deep in dung
I was trodden underfoot
by a vast herd of goats that, like you, were nude;
where as woman and pancake,
we made wordless love beneath the stars,
but when you saw fit
to casually unveil your browned primary nodule
I observed woman-filth on a whopping scale,
as though someone had forced me to watch an entire episode of "Sex and the City"
and I realised then what an utter wally I had been.
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| Re: My Show at the Whiskey a Go Go on the 26th of August 2003 by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
26-Aug-03/3:42 AM |
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Do you really know Rufus Wainwright? I saw him once on "Later with Jools Holland" on BBC 2. Playing "Foolish Love". Quite good.
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| Re: My Show at the Whiskey a Go Go on the 26th of August 2003 by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
27-Aug-03/1:56 PM |
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