Re: Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	25-Aug-05/10:00 AM
My dear it's merely a matter of T's and D’s. You can choose to be chaste or choose to be chased but rarely is a woman both of these for most men are lead from their waist.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	24-Aug-05/6:45 AM
I'll try to explain but it's hard. The ancient Summa had this philosophy of creation that said in order for nothingness to exist there must be the possibility for nothing to exist. Since this particular nothing exists on an infinite scale possibility in and of itself must also be infinite. Infinite possibility = infinite potential. The paradoxical conflict between nothingness and possibility is supposed by the Summum philosophy to cause a chain reaction of negative and positive forces. Voila. Big bang. I have my suspicions about this idea but it sounds to me like they might be close to what the real answer is. You got any ideas? I'd be happy to hear them.
Re: The Big Stupid Dink :) :) by Bethy	23-Aug-05/1:53 PM
Kind of an Erma Bombeck rant. Dink will get a laugh no matter where you use it. Most men will turn Big Dink into a complement. It's just the way our egos work. He didn't deserve a poem anyway.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	23-Aug-05/12:36 PM
I also misspelled "infinite" and "separates".
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	23-Aug-05/12:27 PM
Thanks D. I'm a notorious misspeller but even that one embarrasses me.
Re: Letter from Palermo by Caducus	23-Aug-05/12:19 PM
Powerful stuff but "rubbing herself till I cried." was kinda creepy.
Re: a comment on Leaving the Woods House by zodiac	23-Aug-05/12:09 PM
Actually I think it might need to be phrased "nor on tenterhooks"
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	23-Aug-05/5:35 AM
Sorry that's Summum philisophy no Sumnum.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	23-Aug-05/3:36 AM
What exactly is an atheist? If a person doesn't believe in any religion, why argue with them? Seems like arguing with a brick wall to me. Besides no matter how you look at it you end up with something coming from nothing. If I were to define God at this point in my life I'd say God is the infinate potential that must exist within infinate nothingness. Look up the Sumnum philisophy. If you have infinate potential then why not have any darn thing you want exist including God or whatever. If you say God is beyond our imagination than God stands above all things we see or imagine. The big bang seperates nothingness and infinate potential into matter and anti-matter. So this is my obviously biased take on creation. I choose to believe because in my heart it feels write, because I just want to. So faith and belief are basically whatever floats your boat.
Re: Toy Story by whispern_smoke_wisp	23-Aug-05/2:50 AM
Stay off the acid kid.
Re: a comment on No More Autumn Poems (Edit) by Sasha	23-Aug-05/2:42 AM
In some parts yes. Now! all three of ya. Get out of my box.
Re: Leaving the Woods House by zodiac	23-Aug-05/2:11 AM
First I loved "fucked on the floor." (says it all) and the double meaning of "tenterhooks". Shouldn't it be "THE rabbit ears" unless you have more then one set. "into the dawning world" is the only somewhat cliche line in an otherwise clicheless poem. This poem reminds me of an even sadder moment in my life. I may just might write about it now. Thanks for inspiring me. -9-
Re: Pity Her by Dovina	23-Aug-05/1:26 AM
Don Quixote, The Thinker, Jacob and now her. It's nice to see depression not of the teenage variety.
Re: a comment on Night Shift by ALChemy	23-Aug-05/1:00 AM
Good point. I'll try omitting some of those words like the "are" in "My feet are wearing..." and "as" in "As my zombified..." and then I'll see if it still holds it's rythm. I'll get back to you on that.
Re: No More Autumn Poems (Edit) by Sasha	22-Aug-05/12:06 AM
I agree with Zodiac the last two lines of verse 2 say pretty much the same thing as verse 1. Otherwise it's good.
Re: GIRL IN THE RED DRESS by prettyktm	21-Aug-05/12:02 PM
Did she tell him all these things before or after she tossed his salad? Kudos for making whore-sex so romantic. -10-
Re: American Semele (Edit) by Sasha	21-Aug-05/11:37 AM
Doesn't sound american. More like Emily Bronte's great, great, great grand daughters response to something she saw on Oprah. But very well written in the aesthetic sense. In many ways I envy you.
Re: a comment on Playing The Vibes by impert&ent	21-Aug-05/9:00 AM
Smells kinda fishy to me. (it's a pun. get it?)
Re: a comment on Playing The Vibes by impert&ent	21-Aug-05/8:55 AM
If you changed ropes to hoses than it could be about 9/11 although the fuming part is still questionable. But you get your aeroplanes that way.
Re: a comment on Playing The Vibes by impert&ent	21-Aug-05/8:49 AM
anchors fall scoring planes: Anchors fall marking lines in the seabed i.e. Plains. deep in crossing: Crossing the deep i.e.(ocean or sea). no word is so calm: No word as calm as the seabed. kites adrift marking time: Kites is also a word for sales. making good time or making up time lost. glancing among chorals: I assumed coral was also misspelled. The whole boat skimming across the water near corals. no image is so clear: An unforgetable image. ropes lie writing curls: The ropes lying on the deck curled like cursive script. fuming around brass: ??? Smelly and encircling brass poles or rails. The fuming part is what confused me. I thought you might have ment furling or fumbling. no touch is so plain: Touch (as in detail to the overall image). Is so plain (as in is so simple or obvious). If someone can come up with a more accurate or plausable description then I will commend them for it.