Free verse № 129742
Playing The Vibes
anchors fall scoring planes
deep in crossing
no word is so calm
kites adrift marking time
glancing among chorals
no image is so clear
ropes lie writing curls
fuming around brass
no touch is so plain
A favorite of ay deee.
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I liked the poem once I figured it out.
Another title that might have changed the poems direction: At the Center of the Tsunami.
But that's just plain evil isn't it.
I think you mean "Plain" not "plane in verse 1. Plain is on the sea-bed. Plane is something you do on the surface as in hydroplane.
I do mean plane, though I see what you mean, and I like your interpretation. I am thinking of something else, where plane is the right word, with one reference to a flat surface, like the hull of a ship, and another reference to aeroplanes.
I was hoping the ambiguity in my spelling of certain words would prompt a variety of readings. Again, your reference to the seabed is correct, but I was writing about it in the third line: no wor(l)d is so calm. Similar ambiguities are meant with chorals (corals) and writing (writhing). But I still didn't come up with your take on it. Just proves you've got more imagination!
The title comes from two things, not related to the poem. I took a hit from Caducus, playing with his vibe. I was also listening to an old Cal Tjader tune on the radio that really made me want to move. That cat was something else on vibes.
deep in crossing: Crossing the deep i.e.(ocean or sea).
no word is so calm: No word as calm as the seabed.
kites adrift marking time: Kites is also a word for sales. making good time or making up time lost.
glancing among chorals: I assumed coral was also misspelled. The whole boat skimming across the water near corals.
no image is so clear: An unforgetable image.
ropes lie writing curls: The ropes lying on the deck curled like cursive script.
fuming around brass: ??? Smelly and encircling brass poles or rails. The fuming part is what confused me. I thought you might have ment furling or fumbling.
no touch is so plain: Touch (as in detail to the overall image). Is so plain (as in is so simple or obvious).
If someone can come up with a more accurate or plausable description then I will commend them for it.
But you get your aeroplanes that way.
Let's see if someone else picks it up.
(it's a pun. get it?)
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