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Pity Her

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 22 Aug 2005 · 16 comments

Self aggrandizement, she remembers it well, the notion of greatness beyond possible consummation, then realization, and finally, admission. Driven by irony that something so darling could be so disappointing, she pours another glass, points the pistol, and . . .

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[3] Stephen Robins 22-Aug-05/10:51 AM Reply
no
[n/a] Dovina › Stephen Robins 22-Aug-05/11:54 AM Reply
of course
[8] Bethy 22-Aug-05/2:04 PM Reply
one shot after another...the pistol being the drink...am I anywhere close...:) Bethy
[n/a] Dovina › Bethy 22-Aug-05/3:03 PM Reply
A very kind way of looking at it. Thanks.
[8] INTRANSIT 22-Aug-05/5:21 PM Reply
Not sure I should. Don't know why she's upset, exactly.
[n/a] Dovina › INTRANSIT 22-Aug-05/5:33 PM Reply
Well, it's like this. She gets herself all pumped up and proud like, a kind of PoemRank arogance, but in her real life, and well, she puffes herself up so much, it can't poissibly work out that way in the throws oif life, so she realizes her mistake, admits it, and then figures the whole thing is ironic and very sad.
[8] INTRANSIT › Dovina 22-Aug-05/5:42 PM Reply
I dint wanna assume......
[n/a] Dovina › INTRANSIT 22-Aug-05/5:57 PM Reply
Ah, go ahead. Robins sure as heck did in his CJD indictment.
[n/a] zodiac 22-Aug-05/11:53 PM Reply
Not in the least.
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 23-Aug-05/6:49 AM Reply
Oh, so it's in the MOST then. Thanks.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 24-Aug-05/3:51 AM Reply
Ha ha. Not EVEN in the least. Pity me, I spend 23 hours a day speaking the most stupid imaginable language. For example, this poem in street Arabic would go something like:

Thinking a lot, she remembers it a lot,
the notion of lot-itude
past the possibility you are together,
then you think,
and at the end, you say.

You move by funny thought that
something so nice
will disappoint you a lot,
she pours one more glass,
moves the gun,
and . . .
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 24-Aug-05/8:11 AM Reply
Least of the lesser, lowest in the lowerarchy, crudest of the crude.
[n/a] ALChemy 23-Aug-05/1:26 AM Reply
Don Quixote, The Thinker, Jacob and now her.
It's nice to see depression not of the teenage variety.
[n/a] Dovina › ALChemy 23-Aug-05/6:53 AM Reply
Jacob couldn't find his pistol. It's not nice to see depression in a middle-aged person, but I thik I see what you mean.
[8] INTRANSIT 23-Aug-05/7:44 AM Reply
If this is you, then back off from poetry for a while. If not, then crank out another one.
[n/a] Dovina › INTRANSIT 24-Aug-05/8:12 AM Reply
I've already cranked, and another one came out. I appreciate your concern.