| Re: A Little War Victim by amanda_dcosta |
25-Jun-06/8:16 AM |
Powerful stuff.
The last two lines are a little hard to understand. Do you mean something like "or else I'll be one of those lost to history"?
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| Re: a comment on All Hail! All Hail! America The Golden! by Edna Sweetlove |
25-Jun-06/6:29 AM |
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Everything you write is a satire of yourself.
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| Re: All Hail! All Hail! America The Golden! by Edna Sweetlove |
24-Jun-06/12:05 PM |
Oh poor old mad English poet.
You wish for the days of yore
when the world spat at your name
and called your queen a whore.
But alas your torch has been passed
to a younger more vibrant shore
as your empire rots away like your teeth
and the world now thinks you're a bore.
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| Re: Chord before the crescendo by Caducus |
24-Jun-06/11:40 AM |
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Alway's the fine craftsman Cad.
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| Re: My secret to life by amanda_dcosta |
23-Jun-06/6:20 AM |
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I liked this alot. Especially the last half. Very inspirational. I'll probably be stuck at the DMV half the day today but I get 4 days off from work (WaHoo!:) So maybe I can catch up on my poem reading here and get in some good debates again.
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| Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta |
22-Jun-06/7:52 AM |
Would love to read your paper some day.
Evolution has a problem without mutation. Evolution without mutation will mathmatically and of course logically reach a platue at which there is no more room for improvement/change.
But what is mutation? Some kind of accident or an act of god or niether. What causes a rhino to be born with an extra horn? Well ramblings aside- Last time I checked the US was gettin' whooped, But it's not as big over here at least not yet.
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| Re: a comment on A Sexy Crucifixion Poem by Edna Sweetlove |
21-Jun-06/6:33 AM |
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I don't want to burn in hell for giving it a ten. I spotted you a couple on some of the other poems though.
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| Re: Let's praise great Britannia's golden days of now and then by Edna Sweetlove |
20-Jun-06/5:37 AM |
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Did this all come out of the Redcoat comment? It was all in good fun ya'know.
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| Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta |
20-Jun-06/5:22 AM |
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No, I got it the first time. I only hope you don't interpret the sarcasm I used on Edna Sweetlove in one of her poems as anti-English. To think I'm always warning everyone else about written sarcasm and there I went doing it.
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| Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta |
20-Jun-06/5:16 AM |
If only our atheist friends were here. Right now it's like a soccer match with only one team playing. It is funny how "facts" can be interpreted in so many different ways. makes it hard to argue that they were facts in the first place.
How'd the exams go?
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| Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta |
18-Jun-06/9:42 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove |
18-Jun-06/9:39 AM |
Dear Edna: Such a lady-like response, I'm impressed. How does the English "nigger" version end? Do tell.
PS. I could hardly imagine you liking my more sensitive writing.
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| Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta |
17-Jun-06/8:53 PM |
I'm getting confused now. Do you mean the battle between me and D.A. or the great religious debate that ended in Zodiac and ecargo no longer talking to me and eventually leaving the ranker?
I just didn't think Dark Angel was a girl and I don't remember having a battle with Amanda. -or has D.A. now changed his name to Sweetlove.
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| Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta |
17-Jun-06/10:50 AM |
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Her? Maybe but certainly no lady.
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| Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta |
17-Jun-06/10:47 AM |
Good to see you again.
Stanzas 4 and 5 get a little too "Frosty the Snowman" with their metaphors for me (with the magician's hat thing) and I'm not sure if Eternity should be capitalized but the rest of the poem is a really nice sentement and the rhythm is spot on.
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| Re: a comment on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey |
16-Jun-06/11:04 PM |
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Your welcome, but not welcome.
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| Re: The Last of The Winds by emilyowey |
16-Jun-06/1:22 PM |
Too much repetition of words and phrases in this one. Makes the poem come off as monotonous.
Let me show you:
The last of the winds came today.
A final push.
Tomorrow weâll hear what theyâve left us.
It's message never closer.
Look to the east, you can almost feel it on your cheek and to the west it holds you
like a bed of fallen leaves.
Did you feel the cold?
Itâs always worse than you remember.
I would tell you I made it that way
but you wouldnât believe me.
Not without all the things I'll never say.
The last of the winds came today.
They have not yet gone.
It lingers like a sleep
thatâs not ready to surrender.
A scent left on your shoulder
by a heart so close to yours.
The last of the winds
takes a little of you with it.
Leaves you empty
and allows the possibility of fullness.
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| Re: a comment on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey |
16-Jun-06/1:02 PM |
"Make it more poetic!"
You threw that one out just in case Zodiac might still be watching didn't you?
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| Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta |
16-Jun-06/12:58 PM |
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Too bad it seems he'll never return. Maybe if we say his name 3 times like Beetlejuice...?
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| Re: a comment on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove |
16-Jun-06/12:48 PM |
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Oh, I even backed these 2 comments up too.
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