Re: Gaping Hole by sonawrote	21-Apr-05/6:54 AM
Feels like something I would of wrote. I trulty feel the meaning, if only these other "critiques" could see that.
Re: a comment on A new leaf by Damien	21-Apr-05/6:51 AM
Cheers Goad. Too young, I dont understand "extended double entrendre". Thanks for the time.
Re: a comment on A new leaf by Damien	21-Apr-05/1:37 AM
Thanks Ellasona, love ya attitude. Are NY clubs dangerous?
Re: a comment on Utensils of creation by Damien	21-Apr-05/1:20 AM
I'me glad my existence is funny to you.
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	20-Apr-05/7:19 AM
Oh yeah Zodiac, just checked out your recent comments. I belive you have no right to say anything to anyone, most of your comments were full of offensive irellivent (sorry for spelling) remarks. I notice you enjoy putting people down (wow what an assumption) and love a good argument (another assumption? I'me getting good). heres a few extracts, also I think people should check your voting history, you have an average of 6.25 or something. Utterly discusting. Congratulations, this is the man you just called a brainiac: http://rockmage.com/biograp... Get bored and leave soon. Re: 15 Minute poem by Damien* 18-Apr-05/10:37 PM Just think how much better this poem would have been if you'd spent 30 minutes on it instead of 15. What were you so busy doing that you couldn't spend another fifteen minutes and made it twice as good? I'll bet you were whacking off to either the blonde daughter or the gothish daughter, or both, on Rosanne. Re: Snap by rockmage 17-Apr-05/6:07 AM "rotates a swirl", what? Do you really mean something like "swirls a swirl" or "spins a spin"? Seems like a waste of precious haikullables to me. Re: Why The Spinning Top Appears Too Beautiful To Touch by PsydewaysTears 17-Apr-05/6:05 AM Drop the line at the end if you want this to even start being considered as a real poem. Also, write about a real situation. I know you think you are, but you're not. Make your hero/narrator/whatever walking somewhere, doing something, having a realistic conversation - something to tie things together and be more than just whatever goth cliches popped into your head as you were writing. So you've got a dinner party in there somewhere; use that. Start with a person cleaning stains out of the carpet. Really. Start with the line, "She/he scrubbed stains in the carpet" and go from there. Drop 90% of the lines in this poem that aren't about getting ready for dinner parties. I'm absolutely serious. Even Eliot made his rambling egos WALKING somewhere. Re: Reincarnation by Dovina 17-Apr-05/6:00 AM Not to be irrelevant, but I've always wondered what's the point of reincarnating if you don't remember your past lives. Do you think some people do? If not, how do you think a past self affects somebody's present self? If it doesn't (or doesn't much), isn't it pretty much the same thing as not being reincarnated?
Re: A new leaf by Damien	20-Apr-05/6:37 AM
Before the comments begin I can virtually gaurantee Goad and Zodiac will be here ready to Point my flaws out. So if you dont understand this poem its probably because it is not understandable? Good luck Goad and Zodiac the critques of the future.
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	20-Apr-05/6:30 AM
Here you go again. Zodiac I have read your poetry, Its good, I like your style, I want to be friends. Are you a skitsophrenic (how I think its spelt) as you have offered some very constructive comments. Say what you want just please stop replying like this is a fucking argument.
Re: a comment on Utensils of creation by Damien	20-Apr-05/3:06 AM
OK: Seeken spiritual development classes attended Karate classes Read lots of self help books Practiced Nunchucks at home Practised Bokken at home Read a great book once "understanding the subconcsious" Pass the same homeless person on the way to work and give him something from the shop every time. Really this is silly. Who are we proving ourselves to.
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	20-Apr-05/2:56 AM
What pahtetic rambling for an adult.
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	20-Apr-05/1:22 AM
Me childish, I am simply doing the honest thing and replying to peoples comment. I am also having a bit of fun and not just being boring. As for the assumptions, You are still making them even if you dont express them. Now stop arguing And being "Childish".
Re: a comment on My Dumb Choice...YOU by sonawrote	19-Apr-05/5:13 AM
Can you say something good about anything. You Fu"kin P"ss T"king B"astard. Are we aloud to use " oh great Goad.
Re: Wasted Words by ho_hum	19-Apr-05/4:56 AM
Nice poem. stop thinking........ and dont ........ also forget the...... next time leave.......out
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	19-Apr-05/4:54 AM
Congratulations you have just made around 8 assumptions of the way I personally think JUST from one line, WOW you have a great imagination. you only want positive comments on your poems if you really wanted to improve you would welcome all constructive criticism, but you don't you are a little too insecure to receive constructive criticism Ans as for: "All I need now is an honest opinion of this If I can write this simply do I have a gift?", AM I NOT ALOUD TO USE MY IMAGINATION
Re: a comment on Utensils of creation by Damien	19-Apr-05/1:39 AM
Actually being filthy rich so I could, and believe me or not: share my money with the world
Re: a comment on 15 Minute poem by Damien	19-Apr-05/1:35 AM
I was at work in my break
Re: a comment on 15 Minute poem by Damien	19-Apr-05/1:34 AM
Thanks, you have just pointed out my strong point
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	18-Apr-05/6:33 AM
What do you mean jesus is watching, isn't he?????!!!!!!!
Re: Half a dozen by thepinkbunnyofdoom	18-Apr-05/3:18 AM
No real movement for me but it does represent what you can do with words.
Re: I want to slit my wrist and call it poetry by thepinkbunnyofdoom	18-Apr-05/2:49 AM
Very nice mouthfull, love the style, great talent and wonderfullllll subject.
Re: a comment on 15 Minute poem by Damien	18-Apr-05/2:46 AM
Sorry for the GASTLY grammar mistakes