Re: solace by crin	10-May-02/4:59 AM
Not bad but not good. Ask yourself where you're going when you write. I understand your metaphysical inquiry into security and the savage, but it would make more sense if you framed the poem within a broader context - perhaps the human psyche. Make it anagogical. Tell me something.
Re: stamp by Adriaan	10-May-02/5:04 AM
One of the better romantic haikus I've seen in a while. Good.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-May-02/5:06 AM
Nice job. I enjoyed your modulation of structure and syntax especially.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-May-02/5:09 AM
You have an interesting topic, but it would be more engaging if you wrapped your complaints in skill. Your simple rhymes and poor structure do little to make me sympathize with the narrator's ineptitude; in fact, I feel distanced as if I were being approached by a senile beggar wallowing in life's ruins (or perhaps just his own).
Re: Tom and Jerry by WarrenGDawg	11-May-02/11:11 PM
After returning from the Ann Arbor art museum I'd thought I'd seen some of the best my community had to offer - until I saw this. WarrenGDawg, you are the most gifted and eloquent, most subtle but effective, most adroit and multi-platformed author I've seen since Poe. Keep up the good work. I look forward to seeing what you produce in the future.
Re: Ice Cream Truck by swift_enterprises	12-May-02/11:03 AM
Whoever gave this a 9 is a poetic invalid.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-May-02/11:12 AM
Dark_Angel usually your poetry sucks dick, but this one got a laugh so... 6.
Re: S by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	12-May-02/1:22 PM
This is fucking genius! References to math, intellectualism, athletics, competition, struggle with implicit emotion, agression, and blow jobs (fucking face) all rolled into a simple Haiku! I bow in your wake.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/12:13 AM
Stupid and redundent.
Re: rock me to sleep tonight: by Sapphire	13-May-02/12:14 AM
Sapphire good poetry isn't only composed of words that sound good. It also has a little thing called meaning.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/12:15 AM
Not bad. =] Not good either. =[
Re: geometry by skaskowski	13-May-02/12:16 AM
I like your meaning and parts of your imagery, but it could be made even more powerful. Extend the baby/killer dichotomy and tell me how that relates to innocence. Not bad though. =]
Re: q.e.d. by sunsolid	13-May-02/12:17 AM
Not bad bud. I like the math reference: Quod Erat Demonstradum
Re: Colloid by skaskowski	13-May-02/12:21 AM
Every word should have meaning to the integrity of the poem. "As it rains outside The drops are like tiny fragments of water Falling like objects that are dropped..." Telling me in a banal way what rain is isn't going to get you high marks. Remember to cut out everything that isn't needed, and say what is needed in the most beautiful way possible (that includes the obscene only when called for).
Re: Nyctophobia by crims0ngh0st	13-May-02/12:22 AM
This is really rough. Polish it. Eliminate what you don't need and sanctify that which you do.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/10:26 PM
I see you have meaning but it's not implicit in all your words. Only keep the necessary. Also, a think this poem would be improved by a more definite rhyme scheme.