Re: Heaven Help Me by cyan9	19-Dec-05/7:35 AM
I don't know what this is, except that it should probably be called a prose poem, not free verse. Could be a drug trip, or some trauma, an illness. Whatever it is, the human contact at the end is good.
Re: a comment on Mixed Quartet by Dovina	19-Dec-05/7:17 AM
She means it in a different way from those who argued with me there. She might have said the same thing, but she means it differently. How do I know? Because she means that all races are of equal value, while the others were saying that race does not exist in any menaingful definition. Besides, it's too close to Christmas for you to be stirring up trouble. Shame!
Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy	18-Dec-05/7:07 PM
I believe you most of the time, really. And I feel no hatchet burnings in my skull, not from you anyway.
Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy	18-Dec-05/6:51 PM
It's retaliation for the abuse we take for gushing our own.
Re: My kids by amanda_dcosta	18-Dec-05/6:21 PM
I like to think this is all true. I don't know why, but I want to think that at least one poemranker writes herself as she really is. Please tell me it's true. This is a great life you have. Please keep writing about it just as it is. And agaain, please thell me it's true. And please ignore zodiac when he tells you, as he surely will, that I'm saying this because my life is dull.
Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy	18-Dec-05/6:13 PM
That's exactly right. All my attempts at writing my love notions turn out like kiddieposter mush. (except to the man they're written to). Tell me your love notions, however, and I'll make them into laughable 10-votable literature.
Re: a comment on To Michelle by ALChemy	18-Dec-05/6:08 PM
Your peeping telescoope is zoomed into the wrong window, in which stands a mirror accross the room. Yes, Im convinced of it. Hey, it's yuletide, the hatchet-burying time, when people pretend to get along. Really, give me an honest comment and I'll return the gift.
Re: Mixed Quartet by Dovina	18-Dec-05/5:56 PM
No kidding. Peace on earth among people of all races. Merry Holidays! Happy 2006!
Re: a comment on Privacy by Dovina	18-Dec-05/5:47 PM
Actually, you have partly inspired my recent post. Read and be elated.
Re: a comment on Privacy by Dovina	18-Dec-05/5:43 PM
But that was gay, wasn't it? Mine is not gay, just because it has a line about a gay pervert.
Re: To Michelle by ALChemy	17-Dec-05/9:27 PM
I'm watching you and will tell you what I see after you first do the same.
Re: a comment on Privacy by Dovina	17-Dec-05/9:24 PM
Have you not heard of the Church Where Perverts Protest Privacy Invasion? Would you not agree that a pause is inferred at the end of every unless enjamment is clearly implied? Is not a pause the same as a comma?
Re: a comment on Privacy by Dovina	17-Dec-05/9:19 PM
You are sayingg that "perverts ought to have more privacy" is not the thrust of this poem, and that if I would punctuate, nobody would think that. Okay, point taken. Punctuation probably would help.
Re: a comment on Privacy by Dovina	17-Dec-05/9:17 PM
I'll place your gift with others in a place to be dealt with later. And in keeping with yuletide cheer: thank you, peace, and Merry Christmas.
Re: I love to see the sunrise by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/11:38 AM
A nice, light poem with good rhythm. But again I must take exception to lines that add nothing new or do not say what you mean. These, at least: "And things to do and say." "Through remorse and a helping hand." I doubt if you mean "remorse".
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/11:24 AM
Your plea has sopken directly to the ambiguities I was experiencing this very morning. That someone besides me has suffered from these same tearings and has so cogently presented light in the darkness is akin to an instance of religious grace. Trouble is, my horse is too tall and I'd only splash in the mud dismounting here.
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/10:57 AM
Yes, the baby Jesus is true and sweet. But aren't all babies? It's like saying the tennisball is round and fuzzy. Since your poem is about what distinguishes Jesus from other babies, it seems the line should address that, unless you wish to say that, as a baby, Jesus was about the same as most other babies. That would not be a bad thing to say.
Re: a comment on The Cowardice of Francis Evans by Caducus	16-Dec-05/10:52 AM
yes, all that is true.
Re: a comment on The Cowardice of Francis Evans by Caducus	16-Dec-05/10:50 AM
No, he said he was talking about grass with ice on it. Very good observation. Being retarded, I did not know that.
Re: a comment on The Cowardice of Francis Evans by Caducus	16-Dec-05/10:44 AM
Caducus, he learned a cold-country word from a warm-country Californian and is having fits. Please be patient.