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CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY (Other) by amanda_dcosta
Baby Jesus, true and sweet, Within my heart be born and greet, Shine that star that shone so bright Two thousand years ago one night. Come dear Lord and help me share Your birth within me, to love, to care - Baby Jesus, the One so blest Be born in me and be my guest. I need You Baby everyday - In all I do, in all I say. I need You Baby in all I think Lest each day I begin to sink. Jesus help me not to wait For just one special day each year But let Christmas within my heart Be everyday through joy and tear.

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Posted: December 13, 2005 8:03 AM PST; Last modified: December 13, 2005 8:03 AM PST
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[5] Dovina @ 66.13.145.210 | 13-Dec-05/10:02 AM | Reply
I understand that you wish to share your Christian faith. I wish you would give it a little more thought before writing though. Most of these lines are trite. May I suggest reading CS Lewis, "Mere Christianity" for ideas on how to make your beliefs more digestable.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.44 > Dovina | 13-Dec-05/10:28 AM | Reply
Dear Dovina,

I do not intend to share my Christian faith, just the person who I am. You may not find my poems digestable, but that's acceptable. You have your own identity and that's fine by me. As for me and my poetry, you're gonna get this style whether you like it or not. May be if you pray real hard you might find a turn for the better......
[9] zodiac @ 69.132.67.140 > amanda_dcosta | 13-Dec-05/10:55 AM | Reply
Don't be too hard on her, Amanda. Dovina came here a few years ago with a bunch of ideas about religion nobody else could accept. And though I'd like to think most of the old-time poemranker users have matured since then, I get the feeling sometimes that Dovina's still hurt by her first experiences here, and a little bitter. Anyway, I hope you find the rest of us here aren't such religion-snobs. Or such people-snobs.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.44 > zodiac | 13-Dec-05/10:59 AM | Reply
Dovina,
am really sorry..... i speak without thinking which always gets me into a lot of mess. Sorry.
[5] Dovina @ 17.255.240.206 > amanda_dcosta | 13-Dec-05/3:54 PM | Reply
Please do not allow zodiac to cause sorrow. You may write in whatever style you wish and in promotion of whatever opinions you have. I wish, though, that you would reconsider lines like "Baby Jesus, true and sweet," for what they are really saying. I would not like to see you not give up any of your beliefs, but rather think deeply about how you might convey them in meaningful ways to folks who may differ.

I look foreward to seeing your more recent poems. The ones from 1996 must be inferior to what you are writing now.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > Dovina | 13-Dec-05/8:01 PM | Reply
Ha Dovina... thanks for the encouragement. truth be told, i think i say sorry very easily though it doesn't mean that i mop around feeling bad for myself. i've developed this habit over the past couple of years more after my kids were born....... more like teaching them that there'e a word like sorry. it helps living amicably.......... See you around, and yes, there's a couple of poems to be posted again. Will post them in time.... "I love to see the sunrise".
[5] Dovina @ 209.242.149.240 > amanda_dcosta | 15-Dec-05/2:08 PM | Reply
Yes, and there's no reason for sorrow.

Zodiac and richa enjoy thinking that I've been humiliated in some past. They hope that by saying it, I'll believe, and by agreeing, make it history. They know that history is not necessarily what happened, but what we remember. I usually allow them this small pleasure, not by agreeing, but by not denying. They seem to have so few pleasures in life.
[9] zodiac @ 69.132.67.140 > Dovina | 15-Dec-05/2:24 PM | Reply
(1) "sorry" doesn't mean sorrowing. Please stop saying that.
(2) We don't enjoy thinking you've been humiliated. We know by now you can't be humiliated, even when you've pooed on yourself and don't know it. You think that's a positive characteristic.
(3) You're so full of it, you're brown.
(4) I have many more pleasures in life than you do. Want to count?

zodiac: Loving spouse.
Dovina: Nobody :-(
[5] Dovina @ 209.242.149.240 > zodiac | 15-Dec-05/2:30 PM | Reply
1. They're related
2. Wrong
3. Brown is not bad, but I'm not, and full has nothing to do with it.
4. Bicycling, loving, cooking canned food, eating chips. Score 5:1
[9] zodiac @ 69.132.67.140 > Dovina | 15-Dec-05/3:15 PM | Reply
1. Not closely enough. It just sounds weird. Surely as someone with at least a casual interest in words, you can appreciate that.
2. Good.
4. living in dank conservative hellholes, loving, laving, collecting postcards, once as a lark rolled Stephen Hawking.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.44 > zodiac | 15-Dec-05/5:26 PM | Reply
Come on, isn't there something like 'truce'. shake hands on it and be pals, aw..... come ....on.....! You guys make hisory pretty well on poemranker. Is this also supposed to be a site for personality contests, because if that's the case, the females always win. You know..... behind every successful man there is a woman! zodiac.... now i can see your driving force on poemranker....
[9] zodiac @ 69.132.67.140 > amanda_dcosta | 16-Dec-05/7:08 AM | Reply
I've tried, amanda, believe me. God only knows how many olive branches I've offered, how callously my advances have been rebuffed. I wonder sometimes why I keep trying. But then I get a glimmer of hope, a sign that, maybe, my efforts are finally paying off, that Dovina can climb off her high horse and rejoin regular, earthbound humanity.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > zodiac | 16-Dec-05/9:10 AM | Reply
zodiac,You depict a typical 'crab' nature. the moment one climbs up the sides of the vessel their in, the other fellow crabs always pull the other down telling it to join them on 'earth'... well, try giving her a way out. you might see her coming back ( in polite terms) to terra firma after finding no landing on the clouds.....oops i forgot we're talking about horses here. At the moment let her enjoy her stallion -Split Fire. surely you have an ounce of generosity in you, for that, haven't you. Or am I wrong?
[5] Dovina @ 17.255.240.162 > zodiac | 16-Dec-05/11:24 AM | Reply
Your plea has sopken directly to the ambiguities I was experiencing this very morning. That someone besides me has suffered from these same tearings and has so cogently presented light in the darkness is akin to an instance of religious grace. Trouble is, my horse is too tall and I'd only splash in the mud dismounting here.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > Dovina | 16-Dec-05/10:47 AM | Reply
Dovina, i have been reconsidering, the line ' baby jesus, true and sweet', to begin with. and i feel that baby jesus is true. there's nothing false about him, he is the truth. as for sweet, aren't babies sweet, cute, and the like.

that's how we got christmas.

its just a simple prayer, written by a simple heart, to a simple baby.

You see, i did give thought to your point.

Merry Christmas.....in advance. i might not be around for about ten days or so. In case i manage to sneek in, you might get another wish from me. Have a whole lot of gluttons to feed tomorrow.......our warm up X'mas party. Ginger wine just made....wanna try some?
[5] Dovina @ 17.255.240.162 > amanda_dcosta | 16-Dec-05/10:57 AM | Reply
Yes, the baby Jesus is true and sweet. But aren't all babies? It's like saying the tennisball is round and fuzzy. Since your poem is about what distinguishes Jesus from other babies, it seems the line should address that, unless you wish to say that, as a baby, Jesus was about the same as most other babies. That would not be a bad thing to say.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > Dovina | 16-Dec-05/11:43 AM | Reply
he was human... what if you or i had any form of resemblence as a baby to jesus............ general discription, he's one of us.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.151.150.39 > amanda_dcosta | 16-Dec-05/2:17 PM | Reply
HE WAS NOT HUMAN. HE WAS NOT OF THIS EARTH. TREAD CAREFULLY, AMANDA. YOU'RE MEDDLING IN POWERS YOU CANNOT POSSIBLY COMPREHEND...
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 16-Dec-05/6:51 PM | Reply
Ha ha ha...... you don't scare me buddy boy! Good try! And correction, HE IS NOT HUMAN, HE IS NOT OF THIS EARTH. He is where we strive to reach......the essence of this entire life....for life.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.151.150.39 > amanda_dcosta | 17-Dec-05/2:19 AM | Reply
If you knew anything about monotheism, or indeed Biblical scripture, you'd realise that the incarnation known as JESUS died long ago. Following His death He returned to the MOTHERSHIP, where He instructed the Angel known only as JOHN CONNOR to lower His quivering body into a vat of spiritual lava (He being incapable of self-termination.) Once LIQUIDATED, His essence joined forces with the FATHER and the HOLY GHOST forming the single most powerful entity in the Universe: MEGAZORD http://tinyurl.com/9auyb
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.44 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 17-Dec-05/6:29 PM | Reply
You know, -=D_A=-,P.I., there's a treatment for hallucinations. Could help you if you want. and for a disoriented mind too.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.151.150.39 > amanda_dcosta | 18-Dec-05/9:04 AM | Reply
Look you have you're beliefs and I have mine. Ridicule me all you want, at least I'm staying true to myself. I happen to be a Christian like you, but there are more historical texts relating to Christ's life than just the Bible. We all have different ways of interacting with God; I've chosen to do so through a medium that I feel the most comforable with. I'd appreciate it if you didn't accuse me of being delusional, that's all.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 202.83.45.117 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 19-Dec-05/4:25 AM | Reply
Suit yourself, and merry christmas, by the way. jesus loves you the way you are, he always has and always will.
[9] zodiac @ 69.132.67.140 > Dovina | 16-Dec-05/12:29 PM | Reply
Not so. I challenge both of you to name another baby besides Jesus that can be described as 'true'.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > zodiac | 16-Dec-05/6:59 PM | Reply
Not you definitely!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.151.150.39 > amanda_dcosta | 16-Dec-05/2:21 PM | Reply
"and i feel that baby jesus is true. there's nothing false about him,"

Nothing false... apart from His beard. Contrary to popular belief, Jesus's's beard didn't reach full maturity until He was six years old. In the meantime, He made do with a false beard crudely woven by a local shepherd.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 16-Dec-05/6:57 PM | Reply
And i suppose you're the one who supplied him his false beard.....You have an occupation, -=D_A=-. Not all of us have been priviledged. Lucky You.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.44 | 13-Dec-05/10:22 AM | Reply
Thanks for the applause! anyway, it was written way back in 1996, unedited. Good to know the approval of the presentation and context. Thank you.
[6] nentwined @ 64.60.192.131 | 13-Dec-05/4:44 PM | Reply
Definite points for saying "I need You, Baby" to Jesus. And you got a nice cadence going. Message is a bit plain and word choice seems forced, but still. "I need You, Baby".
[6] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 18-Dec-05/10:24 AM | Reply
Good, now say it in a way you've never heard or read.
Use images and scenes unique in your own personal life as metaphors. How does baby Jesus compare to your own children? Ask yourself what if I loved Jesus in the same way I love my children? How would that change the way I approach my faith? Would it make me a better Christian or a worse one? What if, while nailed to the cross as he said "Father, why have you forsaken me?", what if he was not looking to the skies but instead he was looking us straight in the eyes?



Now write.
[n/a] amanda_dcosta @ 202.83.45.117 > ALChemy | 19-Dec-05/4:22 AM | Reply
Interesting, very interesing! do you challenge all your co-poets to write thus? I like the idea.....lets see what i can do. its a very attractive challenge. how fast i'll get it done is another matter. but i'm gonna try.
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