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CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY (Other) by amanda_dcosta

Baby Jesus, true and sweet, Within my heart be born and greet, Shine that star that shone so bright Two thousand years ago one night. Come dear Lord and help me share Your birth within me, to love, to care - Baby Jesus, the One so blest Be born in me and be my guest. I need You Baby everyday - In all I do, in all I say. I need You Baby in all I think Lest each day I begin to sink. Jesus help me not to wait For just one special day each year But let Christmas within my heart Be everyday through joy and tear.

Dovina 16-Dec-05/10:57 AM
Yes, the baby Jesus is true and sweet. But aren't all babies? It's like saying the tennisball is round and fuzzy. Since your poem is about what distinguishes Jesus from other babies, it seems the line should address that, unless you wish to say that, as a baby, Jesus was about the same as most other babies. That would not be a bad thing to say.




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