Re: a comment on A Poem by BigB	8-Sep-04/10:10 AM
I didn't make that distinction, you did.
Re: Delicate Was by klosterfobik	7-Sep-04/7:31 PM
I see you changed the ending, and the rest seems all different too. "perfect and peculiar us" is very nice.
Re: I WILL SURVIVE by massangel62	7-Sep-04/7:22 PM
This isn't very well written, but maybe I couldn't do better in your circumstance.
Re: a comment on I WILL SURVIVE by massangel62	7-Sep-04/7:20 PM
Yes, that's what she is saying, and no doubt appreciates your encouraging 10.
Re: a comment on I Don't Care by ForgottenSoul17	7-Sep-04/7:08 PM
And just how do you reconcile a 10 vote with a comment like that?
Re: a comment on Pride by Dovina	7-Sep-04/7:05 PM
Have you no empathy for the femininely challenged?
Re: a comment on Who'd suspect? by thepinkbunnyofdoom	7-Sep-04/11:00 AM
Oh, I hate these confusions. Would you please just be forthright. You spelled it due, so there must be something I owe you.
Re: a comment on A Poem by BigB	7-Sep-04/10:56 AM
The death penalty would provide Disneyland with greater realism, a more life-like experience. And failure to flush is a good place to start. It's a more serious offense than say, riding a bicycle in a bike lane while a mother with her pre-school child turns right without looking.
Re: Licking An Ashtray by Blindpoetry	7-Sep-04/10:46 AM
I'm exhausted. I've kissed a smoker, and it is like licking an ashtray. It's their business what they do with their health, and it's mine what I think of mine and their effect on it.
Re: Who'd suspect? by thepinkbunnyofdoom	7-Sep-04/10:39 AM
You've convince me. I'd love to. Just a few clean-ups would make your offer perfect. Please say either "will" or "can" in the third line, I'm so enamored I don't care which. And please tell me if there is something due you or if there is just dew on the grass. As for what reamins of me, that's tomorrow, this is tonight. Gosh, is my lipstick smeared?
Re: a comment on Into My World by sliver	7-Sep-04/10:02 AM
Far fetched, but some women like that sentimental stuff.
Re: a comment on End by Dovina	7-Sep-04/9:41 AM
It is not how I expected I would behave. Thanks.
Re: a comment on A Poem by BigB	6-Sep-04/5:27 PM
I'm glad you see the distinction.
Re: a comment on End by Dovina	6-Sep-04/5:26 PM
Thanks, but sometimes it’s best to just move on.
Re: a comment on End by Dovina	6-Sep-04/5:25 PM
Silence is not aloofness.
Re: a comment on End by Dovina	6-Sep-04/5:25 PM
est = End of Stammerous Testing
Re: a comment on Edges by Blue Magpie	6-Sep-04/9:02 AM
It's a matter of preference, more than of quality. Follow through is taking an idea along with a poem as the poem progresses and working the idea into something else or something better or even something wrong. Take Dan Garcia-Black’s recent posting, for example. It lacks the rhythm and prose of yours, but it follows through. The meaning-prose trade-off is difficult. If we are too vague in image and metaphor, meaning is lost to readers who don’t get it; if too direct, we are accused of simplistic babble. This poem is close to a good balance, but too far to the prose side for my preference. It’s a good poem.
Re: Into My World by sliver	6-Sep-04/8:30 AM
How is this an acrostic? What do the first two lines mean? How does Snow White pale in one mirror more than in any mirror? The last verse is nice.
Re: a comment on Pride by Dovina	6-Sep-04/8:11 AM
“she” in the last line is ambiguous. It could mean either the daughter or the mother. If it means the daughter than the line is trite. If it means the mother than the daughter knows the mother knows. “creep into the uterus” doesn’t quite work with the next line: “And talk about love, and cry.” I often give an 8 or below when I don’t understand a poem. This one deserves a 2.
Re: a comment on On Being Born by emilyowey	5-Sep-04/10:35 AM
Please, at least point out the grammar and spelling.