Re: a comment on Returning by Dovina	29-Apr-05/6:45 AM
Paradelle of Progress
Re: a comment on Returning by Dovina	29-Apr-05/6:38 AM
When a spiny caterpiller appears metamorphosed into a gentle butterfly, what is a green leaf to think.
Re: a comment on Returning by Dovina	29-Apr-05/6:16 AM
It's easy really, when all the other doors are closed.
Re: a comment on Returning by Dovina	29-Apr-05/6:14 AM
I hadn't thought of it as my best. No matter, thanks for the kudos.
Re: a comment on Panama by Dovina	28-Apr-05/5:15 AM
The subject of every sentence is either "he" or "she." The phrases following the first line of every verse refer back to the subject. You don't have to like it, but that's the layout.
Re: Sailor Dress by sunset sky	27-Apr-05/7:01 AM
Well told story. Why did she do it? - that's the lingering question. Welcome to poemranker.
Re: I killed you in New Mexico by sunset sky	27-Apr-05/6:56 AM
Provocative, but lacking whatever it was that connected them and a reason for the love-lilling.
Re: Lost key for a hall-closet by zodiac	27-Apr-05/6:41 AM
Verses 1 and 2 flow well. Verse 3 starts a transition (knew is really known or new) "She's a lowland topography to her life" is good. Some lines seem unrelated, like, "a man never lost without thinking the word new"
Re: a comment on This one the love by thepinkbunnyofdoom	27-Apr-05/6:23 AM
Then try Victoria's Secret chaffon panties and matching bra. I believe you'll become more attractive. I will if you will.
Re: Ode To The Fly In My Beer by ChaseValentine	26-Apr-05/4:55 PM
The last line kills it. Happiness is not at the bottom of a bottle.
Re: am i right? by celticskatermatt1	26-Apr-05/4:51 PM
"will we/they ever see the truth?" is the most overused and senseless line in all of poesy.
Re: a comment on Self Conscious by Damien	26-Apr-05/2:46 PM
No, no, no. Please read what I said. this poem is only one example of a doward trend, apparently caused by over-sensitive reaction to the criticism you have received.
Re: a comment on Self Conscious by Damien	26-Apr-05/5:49 AM
Did you read what I said?
Re: a comment on This one the love by thepinkbunnyofdoom	25-Apr-05/11:08 AM
Amen to that.
Re: Self Conscious by Damien	25-Apr-05/11:05 AM
Frankly, I think you've gone downhill. Your early poems showed a unique, though debatably inadequate style. Then, after much ridicule, you turned another way - not as good, in my opinion, as what you can make of your original stuff. that original style is workable, I think, but needs refinement, which is the hard part. Receiving inspiration is easy; developing craft is not.
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	25-Apr-05/8:51 AM
P = Pimple writing simpleton C = one who Complains about how they get tagged as a result of the pimples they write. (C implies P) is indeed illogical, even if P implies C. My most recent whine was not intended to follow logically from your comment, and may be like flogging of a dead horse, but don't you think it has merit? I mean, someone who tags (uses rote clues to classify) is no better and probably worse than someone who whines. Admitedly, the two things may be unrelated.
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	24-Apr-05/5:09 PM
Since I'm already tagged as a whiner, what the hell, here's another whine. What you say about tagging works both ways. Is a person who tags any less of a pimple-writing simpleton than than a person who complains about being tagged? I think such a person is more simple than a whiner because he/she has not the strength to look past surface implications while the whiner at least tries to expose charges leveled by the unthinking whose heads are filled with fixed notions.
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	24-Apr-05/7:09 AM
That is further support for my growing belief that a middle-aged white American woman can say nothing about our black population without automatically being tagged is some incorrect way.
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	24-Apr-05/6:59 AM
2) The tone of the narator is so overly submissive to abuse that a reader has to ask if she is really serious when she says "Go ahead . . ." and "It’s a new experience for me, that’s all. Maybe it’s time."
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	24-Apr-05/6:52 AM
You are saying that my way of expressing a racial issue is naive and that I am not a racist. Good, and quite possibly true. I am coming to disbelieve in the possibility of expressing a racial issue in a passionate way without coming accross as racist. It should be possible, maybe I'll try again.