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Ode To The Fly In My Beer (Ode) by ChaseValentine
You dance, body propelled by bossa nova, across the lips of a warm Corona. The buzz of rum, hot on your breath - you whisper to yourself, lost in the Spanish cantations, the quick taps of the electric piano. You fly unevenly (sometimes in loop-de-loops) through the night on tattered wings that carry you from drink to drink samba to samba finding happiness only at the bottom of an empty bottle.

Up the ladder: Feel Like A Failure
Down the ladder: NO TIME!!

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8
Weighted score: 5.095362
Overall Rank: 6113
Posted: April 26, 2005 3:50 PM PDT; Last modified: April 26, 2005 3:50 PM PDT
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[6] Dovina @ 204.250.12.246 | 26-Apr-05/4:55 PM | Reply
The last line kills it. Happiness is not at the bottom of a bottle.
[7] zodiac @ 213.186.171.241 | 27-Apr-05/6:52 AM | Reply
bossa nova is in Portuguese, not Spanish.
[7] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.130.62.63 | 27-Apr-05/3:47 PM | Reply
Right...
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