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Ode № 124098

Ode To The Fly In My Beer

Member since 2005 · Posted 26 Apr 2005 · 3 comments

You dance, body propelled by bossa nova, across the lips of a warm Corona. The buzz of rum, hot on your breath - you whisper to yourself, lost in the Spanish cantations, the quick taps of the electric piano. You fly unevenly (sometimes in loop-de-loops) through the night on tattered wings that carry you from drink to drink samba to samba finding happiness only at the bottom of an empty bottle.

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[6] Dovina 26-Apr-05/4:55 PM Reply
The last line kills it. Happiness is not at the bottom of a bottle.
[7] zodiac 27-Apr-05/6:52 AM Reply
bossa nova is in Portuguese, not Spanish.
[7] <{Baba^Yaga}> 27-Apr-05/3:47 PM Reply
Right...