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17-May-04/8:50 PM |
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I love the first two stanzas, something everyone can relate to.
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17-May-04/9:05 PM |
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I agree with Shin Shuu. This was well done, could probably be tweaked a bit, but well done.
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| Re: Sunrise by Katrina |
17-May-04/9:21 PM |
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Some parts of this were cliche, but its so true, isn't it funny how life works like that, and I know I could have written the same thing, so I can't fault you for that! Regardless, I love this, good job.
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| Re: What's The Point? by Phalkon |
17-May-04/9:32 PM |
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Well that attitue will get you no where! But I do sympathize. A bit whinny, but I am not one to judge! Not bad.
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| Re: Wanting To Much by Katrina |
17-May-04/9:41 PM |
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Do you mean for the title to be "Wanting TOO Much"? Some spelling errors, sorry to be nit picky. I think you can cut some stuff out, a bit repetitive, a standard poem on lost love, what makes this special or stand out? I think you could make this really good, you have plenty to work with. Nice start. Bob, can you read my poems when you are in the mood to give all 10's?!! :) Thanks!
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17-May-04/10:57 PM |
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I love this. The first two lines of the bridge maybe could use some work, but when put to music it probably wouldn't bother me. Regardless, I love it.
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| Re: Let Me Swing by caitydee |
20-May-04/10:36 PM |
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This is a work in progress-but I wanted some feedback, thanks!
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25-May-04/8:16 PM |
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26-May-04/9:14 AM |
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Its amazing how the feeling of being "enough" or the desire to be enough can be totally consuming, I like the first half of this and I feel like you have read my mind of some of these, but skip the last line, I want you to yell this at him not ask for him to mold you into what he wants!
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| Re: The Babe in the Alligator Pajamas by caitydee |
26-May-04/4:00 PM |
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What on EARTH are you talking about?? Again, its not my baby, please leave a comment on the poem, save your ranting for your own, thanks!
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| Re: loneliness untold by francis nor capule |
26-May-04/8:09 PM |
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well if its a break up poem, its a good one. From one break-up survivor to another, I love this.
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| Re: Get it straight by tre |
27-May-04/8:49 PM |
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I really like this hun :)
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27-May-04/8:51 PM |
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I realy love the idea of cleaning up the past and renewing past pain in the present. Excellent.
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| Re: Know Me by caitydee |
29-May-04/8:06 PM |
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31-May-04/9:10 PM |
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The title alone is enough to make me love this!
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1-Jun-04/10:59 AM |
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I was disappointed to see that you had deleted all your poems. I enoyed reading them hun.
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| Re: Vibrissae by ggawrysi |
1-Jun-04/11:00 AM |
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Oh I'm sure you could train hamsters. Maybe you should write a poem about scottish midgets, or Irish midgets, could be interesting.
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| Re: Garden of Monuments by RevHydra |
1-Jun-04/11:18 PM |
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| Re: Isn't it a wonder by caitydee |
10-Jun-04/11:31 AM |
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god'swife-How can you give me a zero and not leave a comment?
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| Re: Even manic dreamers must face Atropos by SupremeDreamer |
18-Jun-04/9:45 PM |
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Very well done, I like the repition, yet its not overdone so it still flows, it just makes sense, I really like this one.
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