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Wanting To Much (Free verse) by Katrina
Wanting to tell you how I feel Wishing I could tell you exactly what is on my mind To not hold anything back just let it all out But Im so affraid Affraid to let you in Scared of being the one that gets hurt again To many times before have I let this happen And now I believe this one is real, but I am scared from the ones that have hurt me before Should I allow my fears to take control of my heart Or should I take my fears and shatter them to the wind I do not know But I do know I do not want to lose you So I musant be affraid I must believe this is real, know you are not going to do what the others have done Believe in what my heart is telling me to do Allow you to get close I will open my heart and soul to you, allow all of myself to be seen by you I will knock down all boundaries, no more those, no more of pulling you close than pushing you away I do not want to play no more games Now you have all of me, I have told you everything, every emotion, every thought, every feeling, and givin you all I have to give And now you say you want to leave Why do you say this now After all I have done for you I have givin myself and my heart to you What is wrong, what have I done I know we can make this work I knew this would happen if I allowed someone to get close There is nothing I can do to make you stay or change your mind Just go There is nothing to do now Goodbye

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.2384057
Overall Rank: 4136
Posted: May 16, 2004 11:00 PM PDT; Last modified: May 16, 2004 11:00 PM PDT
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Comments:
[10] Bobjim @ 212.135.1.53 | 17-May-04/4:55 AM | Reply
I feel kind today. All poems get a 10.
[8] caitydee @ 64.12.116.70 | 17-May-04/9:41 PM | Reply
Do you mean for the title to be "Wanting TOO Much"? Some spelling errors, sorry to be nit picky. I think you can cut some stuff out, a bit repetitive, a standard poem on lost love, what makes this special or stand out? I think you could make this really good, you have plenty to work with. Nice start. Bob, can you read my poems when you are in the mood to give all 10's?!! :) Thanks!
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 212.219.223.8 | 18-May-04/2:50 AM | Reply
Wrong.

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