Re: a comment on Unclean by Dovina	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	14-Jun-05/9:54 AM
That's one of the most stupid remarks I have ever read on internet
Re: Youth Spent by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Dovina 69.175.32.185	14-Jun-05/9:52 AM
It has some good lines, but overall it's too mushy for my taste. "love so clean so void of emptiness" seems disingenuous.
Re: a comment on Unclean by Dovina	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	14-Jun-05/9:49 AM
You're an even bigger idiot. As intolerant as Jew-Hating? Are you living in a retard home?
Re: a comment on Unclean by Dovina	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	14-Jun-05/9:48 AM
You're an idiot. There's much worse than that out there.
Re: a comment on Flamingo's Stare by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Dovina 69.175.32.185	14-Jun-05/9:38 AM
Sorry, yes. The haiku structure works well for some things, but I get a feeling of being restraind by it in this poem.
Re: a comment on Returning by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	14-Jun-05/9:31 AM
Probably because of "Embers of burned out nights still glow between us." But that was not in my thoughts.
Re: a comment on Panama by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	14-Jun-05/9:28 AM
Well, maybe a little. I hope it says more than raunchy though.
Re: a comment on Prickly Pear by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	14-Jun-05/9:25 AM
By Job, you’ve got it.
Re: a comment on Unclean by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	14-Jun-05/9:19 AM
I’m glad you saw the scene as you read it. Any disagreement with premise or a feeling that the poem is insensitive, I fully respect. This story was told to me by a person close to the events, and told as a true story.
Re: Mr. Campbell's final journey by jroday	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	14-Jun-05/6:58 AM
The rhyming keeps the very long lines from going astray. This is a good one. It would have been a lot better if you hadn't been so outright about 'strapping into an electric chair'. Stanza 2 contains all we need to now about that.
Re: Sudden Change by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/1:00 AM
Fine
Re: a comment on Prickly Pear by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/12:59 AM
and I stare at the San Bernardino mountains and hope the fires don't start again.. .but with all the rain... who knows?
Re: Prickly Pear by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/12:58 AM
I self-define as a cactus that wants a hug.
Re: Panama by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/12:57 AM
raunchy
Re: Returning by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/12:55 AM
I thought of cigarettes when I read this. Camel hard pack. I have no idea why.
Re: Racism by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/12:54 AM
I like this poem.
Re: Unclean by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/12:36 AM
I disagreed with the general premise of your poem. However, I did see the images in my head as I read it.
Re: a comment on Unclean by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/12:35 AM
It's also an insensitive poem. In fact, it's as intolerant as Jew-hating; In my humble opinion.
Re: a comment on Flamingo's Stare by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.35	14-Jun-05/12:19 AM
do you mean 'without' the restraints?
Re: a comment on Books by sacred_poet_me	sacred_poet_me 70.68.76.244	13-Jun-05/8:37 PM
Kk..but i think this poem is pretty imaginative. But apparently not from other people's point of view.