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Mr. Campbell's final journey (Free verse) by jroday
Realities rivers rage with turbulence at the banks of the man's heart,
as he embarks on a journey to redemption.
He does not take this endeavor lightly; on bended knees he prays with
clapped hands nightly, asking for forgiveness for a trouble soul in need
of repair, a final recitation of his thoughts, a pause then a vacant
stare.
He takes one footstep forward, a naked man his feet are bear.
He gets dressed one last time and eats the last meal that's been
prepared,then the guards and a priest lead Mr. Campbell from his cell.
He says a silent prayer as they strap him into the electric chair.
Realities Rivers which once raged with turbulence at the banks of the
man's heart are now calm; as he journey to redemption.
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.1666665
Weighted score: 5.0448236
Overall Rank: 6994
Posted: June 14, 2005 3:25 AM PDT; Last modified: June 14, 2005 3:25 AM PDT
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repair-stare
Hm, indeed mostly suggestions of rhyming, a loose alliteration.
On second view the poem's not improving...
it.